itsjustemilie

thanks a tonne guys! I'll obviously spelling and punctuation is a issue of mine. I'll take into account all of your corrections and suggestions and hopefully improve my poem (:

thanks for the review, I Haven't actually finished the story i was just giving the basic concept so i can get reviews on whether i should stick with the story ...

Sweet, Your story is kind of like the ceremony's that you where telling me about. I love the second half of the story, the whole idea is creepy but interesting ...

Thanks guys, Revised it a bit. I'm not going to spend to much time on this poem however. It was pretty much just a quick poem i wrote when i ...

The message behind the poem was beautiful, not to mention the poem itself was worded beautifully. I have no criticism well done

This almost made me cry. I don't know whether to say its wonderful, because its about something so tragic. but its definitely very well written piece.

quite a nice poem, you used a good range of descriptive words I do however think the flow of the poem could be improved, overall a really nice piece to ...

beautiful i love it , you really poured your heart into this poem and it shows. I enjoyed this and i'm looking forward to seeing more writing from you. happy ...

This is beautiful, i really enjoy the style of writing you use and the feelings you put into this poem. It's a very good length, and keeps the reader interesting. ...

well written, well worded. all around good lyrics. perhaps some lines could have been shortened but an overall really good job well done!

like it! well done

enjoyed reading this poem, its sad but interesting a very well written poem well done happy writing

love the idea, some lines could do with a touchup but an overall great job well done. happy writing

Great poem love your style! happy writing

I like it, its well written and straight to the point. :) happywriting