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well it is actually what the muslims do to the dead. and there is a myth behind it that i havent quite linked in which is why i was planning on extending it
This is well written and very suspenseful. However, I'm wondering where you're trying to get at with the "funeral ceremony for Muslims?"
Sweet, Your story is kind of like the ceremony's that you where telling me about.
I love the second half of the story, the whole idea is creepy but interesting at the same time.
I love how the character is sort of a blank canvas so when you read the story you feel like your them. It will be interesting to see the ending.
The first part of the story is a bit rough cause i think your trying to rush to get to the interesting bits of the story. Maybe if you just add some more emotions and descriptions of the scenery and people's actions it could bring the first part to life as well.
I love you you described the person she see's in the cloth, and how the main character never see's he's face it leaves a lot of mystery and makes you want to continue reading the story.
love it so far looking forward to reading the rest.
Sweet, Your story is kind of like the ceremony's that you where telling me about.
I love the second half of the story, the whole idea is creepy but interesting at the same time.
I love how the character is sort of a blank canvas so when you read the story you feel like your them. It will be interesting to see the ending.
The first part of the story is a bit rough cause i think your trying to rush to get to the interesting bits of the story. Maybe if you just add some more emotions and descriptions of the scenery and people's actions it could bring the first part to life as well.
I love you you described the person she see's in the cloth, and how the main character never see's he's face it leaves a lot of mystery and makes you want to continue reading the story.
love it so far looking forward to reading the rest.
I am actually going to extend this but have no time because i have HSC going on at the moment haha