innerbeauty555

i have written music to go with it, so i have to use slang so it goes with the music You still say "looking", "'cause", and "I", so that makes ...

Wow. Awesome. Hilarious. What else can I say? Go, TI-89! Poem of the week! :-) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

This was very good. It was very descriptive, and yes, I agree it was sad. It probably flows better with the music. Well done. :-) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

By the way, the "sane" part is kind of an inside joke. See, I consider myself insane, so when I'm not feeling like myself, I say I'm sane. :-D Oh, ...

I love chocolate... Good poem, by the way. :-D

Whoa. Amazing poem. I-I have no criticism. Wow.

Whoa. I really don't know what else to say. Whoa.

I liked it. The wording was a little awkward at parts, but it was overall very good. Keep it up! :-) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

Is it a rock song? Yeah, it's like a pop rock for most of it, but it gets into a crazy, rocking-out guitar part at the "oxymoron" verse (or bridge? ...

I liked this poem. It makes a clear point--that you are who you are. I think that's awesome! Keep it up! :) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

I agree! This is great! I would like to hear how the music goes, too, because there are so many ways it could go. --Di :)

Overall, I liked this. The first verse was kind of choppy, though. "You can't valse"? I looked that up. In Webster's it's a type of waltz, in American Heritage it ...

I agree with most of the comments made. This was excellent. It's very sweet. Keep writing! :) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

I didn't like the line breaks, either. It was way too broken up that way. I couldn't even concentrate on the poem. --Di :)