Bloodshot eyes cracking open,
From severe lack of sleep,
I cannot think for the life of me,
And I may be in too deep.
How I'm staying awake to write this poem,
Is beyond my wildest dreams,
And though I'm in an emotional drought,
Everything feels as it seems.
When I get my feeling back,
Will I feel again for you?
When returned is my love of everything,
Will I still deny it's true?
In twenty-four hours,
How will I feel?
Will I be happy?
Will I know if it's real?
I really did think,
It was under control,
But I still act differently,
When I feel like a troll.
How can I get butterflies,
That I trample to the ground,
When my emotions are a blur?
When I emit no sound?
When my thoughts are blank,
But something is there?
When my eyes are glued shut,
And yet I stare?
Why do I feel awkward,
Writing this down,
As if the thought of letting it out,
Will surely make me frown?
How can I feel awkward,
Without feeling, anyway?
When my mind stops at ev'ry syllable,
Why do I have so much to say?
Why am I so worried?
This should flow down the drain!
Now, do you believe what I have told you?
I'm scary when I'm sane!
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It was pretty good. You wrapped everything together and rhymed all of the words, something I've never been able to do. All in all, your good. I liked it because everyone has considered me insane for so long I've started acting insane.
They say that I come across as a Evil Genius now.
MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!
Anyway, your a good poet.
This was a really good effort! I think you said it all, without repeating yourself. Good job
whoa!,thats along poem. It was wierd but good. IT had good descriptons of what your feeling and in a wierd canna way it reflected that image of a nut( im not saying your a nut, other than having an uncontrolable cheese-adiction i no nothing about you) any way , this was realy good , and compared to my poems is a legend , but when i write my first peom you will understand what an insignifficant complement that was
, any way keep writing poems cs theres a realness about your work , its not all fake and daffadles and the texture of roses crap. c u rnd
By the way, the "sane" part is kind of an inside joke. See, I consider myself insane, so when I'm not feeling like myself, I say I'm sane.
Oh, and as you can tell, I wrote this when I was tired. Therefore, it probably needs a lot of work. Feel free to comment as harshly as you want to.
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