I am me

I don't really like it myself but I have nothing better to do :? so I'm posting it..critiques are welcomed anyways.

I am me
By the way I act
The things I do
And the way I think

I know sometimes
I say stupid things
Make dumb jokes
And I am clumsy

But those are the things that make me special and unique
Those are all the things that make me who i am
And I am me

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Snip Snip
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It's cute, but very... plain, like straightforward. Poetry is more interest when it's less simple, and really mkes you think. This sounds almost liike a cheesy pop song, I think if you replaced some words, it might have potential.

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xanthan gum
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um, yeah, i'd start over. yes, it's cute, but that doesn't amount to much. try again.

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Writersdomain
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I must agree with timjim. The point is clear, yes, almost too blatantly clear. You have an idea here and if you want to write a poem about, you do that, but think it over more. Think of examples, phrases that could convey your message more creatively and piece them together. Then you will have a poem with a clear message, but not lacking in creativity. Have fun with this and keep writing.

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innerbeauty555
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I liked this poem. It makes a clear point--that you are who you are. I think that's awesome! Keep it up! :)

-*-*--Diana--*-*-

I am a guy so i am not supposed to say cute, so cool!

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timjim77
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Eh, not much to critique. Unsubstantial as a poem. I'd say scratch it and start anew.



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