Chocolate

I have to say this is my favorite poem because I LOVE CHOCOLATE!!! and apperantly im not alone...YAY for chocolate. I do like the big words to describe this chocolaty wounder!!

this is good, although you describe it a little too much.
but yeah, chocolate, every one loves it.

short and sweet. symbolic or not, the chocolate images sweetened my day.

I read it again, and I have to agree with *singsoffkey*. Those two lines could be sold to Dove or Hershey's or Godiva or See's... Oh gravy... I soo need chocolate now...

*wanders off*

HereAndNow wrote:I like it! Chocolate is meant to be written about...

Good Job!

Seriously, those two lines could be sold to a chocolateer. They are the stuff ads are made of... very lovely and very catchy.

This is a cute little poem. The subject of chocolate is one generally agreed upon. Nice and simple.

The problem I have with this is your division of lines. You often have a line break in a seemingly random spot and then a comma in the middle of the line dividing the thoughts. If you did this in order to accent something it would be okay. But, I don't see any of that coming out. I would suggest it split more like this.

Chocolate is a...

Delectable delight indeed. Note: I really like this alliteration here!
With such a rich flavor, it seduces me.
I can indulge in it all day, and every day
The aroma entrances me
and envelops my heart
with a bountiful love.

Chocolate is the food of admiration,
the sweet symbol of elation,
and the remedy for desolation. Splitting this section in particular makes your scheme of "ation"s pop even more.

I love chocolate

I have to agree with Amice with the "envelops my heart with a bountiful love". But I still have a great passion for chocolate. Thanka alot!! you gave me a craving for chocolate!! ANd i don't have any.

Oh great! You just gave me a craving! And I am giving up chocolate for Lent!!!!! Now I will have to give up something else! HEhehe jk ! Keep up the good work!

I love chocolate...


Good poem, by the way.

Chocolate... Everyone should write something about chocolate.

I know chocolate has gotten me through more than one tough day. *sniffles* I owe it so much.

envelops my heart with a bountiful love.

This does chocalate justice.

The last stanza is so poetic... You should totally sell that to some sophisticated chocalate company to print on their wrappers.

The line-breaking doesn't make much sense.

I want chocolate.

Whoo..... I LOVE CHOCOLATE!

](*,) d'oh that got me thinking about chocolate and i don't have any

So do I,I love chocolate.Yummy!!
Nice one.

I like it! Chocolate is meant to be written about...

Good Job!

short but sweet i think his portrayed eating choc pretty well .. i think its quite a hard subject 2 be creative bout cos its such a basic action but i think his pulled it off quite well so nice 1 m8 keep at it

sorry u need 2 work on it a bit dosnt suit your age i expect this from the likes of 13 year olds gud luck nxt time

XD

Nice and cute. Chocolate is indeed wonderful, eh?

Thanks for your positive reaction.

.... And you're 17 years old?
Whoa... I never thought of chocolate with such big words.
Chocolate is simple
Chocolate is kind
It's the real type o' chocolate
That I cannot find...

But wow, you write just like one of my friends... who hasn't spoken to me in nearly a year... wow.... (Ryan Romalle WHY!?)