inkwell

I just discovered your poem and found myself in a very ironic situation since I literally JUST submitted an ode to stars. Nonetheless I yield. I liked your poem's tricky ...

My heart dwells on the pain and sorrow The hurt of not knowing what will come tomorrow The lust and love you put me through And not knowing if what ...

Cool poem! I like the concept, I write about it as well. Imagery was fantastic, the ink and the "crimson margin", "colorless marble". Really epic description. The structure is pleasing ...

I liked your poem, it was very emotional. An interesting mix of hope and desperation. I would recommend restructuring it into more lines with less length, add some punctuation and ...

I'm not usually a poet but I was inspired. This is based on a very close friend of mine and it is the product of late night insomnia, I'd love ...

Many times I have heard before, that sound which makes me shiver. It is like a chilling wind, that rushes down my spine. Love this stanza. :) It is a ...

So, first thoughts are, don't use "shining" so much (it's in the title, first stanza, and second stanza; try to cut out one of those), but otherwise this is an ...

This is in response to a challenge I received after writing a fairly depressing poem. I had to write a poem about joie de vivre, which after a quick google, ...

Oh... my.. GOD. Let me just start by saying, the length of this poem was daunting at first, but once I started reading, I couldn't stop! I was literally (I ...

Its not that great, but its what I came up with. Trash it, hate it, burn it, shoot it. Then tell me how to fix it. --------------------------------------- I walk among ...

Well let me just start off by saying I commend you on your theme. My religious themed poems always turn out like rubbish, but this is quite good and written ...

I really liked this! I loved the pacing and the weird narrator who instructs on how to be dead but seems to almost be tricking and manipulating the listener who ...

To be honest I felt a certain lack of ingenuity in the poem. I didn't feel a connection from the writer to what was written. Besides that it was a ...

Terrifically beautiful poem Holly! The days are paper-thin. Gauzy, insubstantial fabric, slipping from my fingers on a windy day. I watch them float away, twisting about softly as they climb ...

Welcome to YWS! Always great to see new writers here. For starters I have to say that your poem is very saddening. Mostly because your description of the potato was ...