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A couple months ago (self-promotion, skip for review) I also submitted a poem about tea. And I, with the backing of Captain Picard, have to say the caffeine in Earl ...

Short, simplistic, (which is fine) but awfully gimmicky. I thought the first stanza was plain boring and a waste of space to be honest. There wasn't anything poetic about it ...

I like your poem, Knightly. The repetition worked well for the dual versions of the story and the analogies were interesting. One little gripe of mine is that you said ...

I honestly almost hit the back button when I read "Happyness". Never a good sign when the title is misspelled. The "y" should be an "i" just so you know. ...

I really was touched by you in this poem. I think there are some minor errors but I don't care, this poem was very authentic, true, and honest. That's all ...

Hi greymachine! I like this poem but am irked by the lack of punctuation at the end of your sentences, was it intentional? Also, your plural words with "s" at ...

I love the first stanza because besides its powerful phrasing I was left with the dual interpretation of being lightninged and of sinning from every "side" at the same time. ...

Welcome to YWS! I love this little chunk of prose! Is it stream of conscious? I like the pacing and of it and the ending is really interesting and provoking. ...

I agree with Noelle that you should fix the contradiction. I also think that you should remove, "however you are not" since I think the reader can pretty much figure ...

I like the minimal two lines at the center but the squiggles are silly. Even if you are talking about string theory and are forming a picture, it should be ...

This is a lovely poem! I was swept away by its cheery insouciance (word of the day!) and pure escapism. Giving each other "the ultimate high" seemed a little out ...

You real have a knack for poetry, don't you? The minimalism, word choice, and sort of story-telling here is really quite nice and I can already see a style developing ...

OK, so first of all I'd love for you to let us know your inspiration for this poem. :) Second of all I think this is the darkest poem of ...

You pulled off another charming poem once again! I applaud your polished presentation, fitting alliteration, and warm descriptions. Don't stop writing because I see a lot of potential in you ...

It's silver light is now on my finger. Hey Alzora! This is a wonderful and charming poem! My only complaint is that this quoted stanza contains an error. "It" doesn't ...