hopeispeace

Ok, hold on tight. we're gun'a have a great review today! "This is where it all began, A pen, a paper, and my shaking hands." This started off a little ...

Warning; the following is total fluff; seriously, though, this kind of writing has potential if you ask me. You manage to keep a casual voice about a topic that usually ...

I really like some of the metaphors here! One thing I would change, is that it's a bit confusing how Loneliness speaks as though the reader is interviewing it. The ...

Reading this, I sware it's like you got in my mind and wrote the very words I've been whispering to myself ever since I can remember. They tell me Im ...

You have a good basic idea, but you need to make this more origonal. I'm sorry, but honestly just about every little thing in this story is used to death. ...

Contrary to previous comments, I think the line about sunsets makes perfect sence...I dont understand the confusion on this. This is a beautiful poem. It flows nicely and the wording ...

I really really liked this poem! Its very. .well..poetic! The only thing Id have to say is that it doesnt nessesarilly flow very well. Although, the story line is sortof ...

OK, so, everyone's a critic :) here goes.. Rain is pitter pattering in different interwoven patterns. This line doesn't flow. the word "different" or "interwoven"...one needs taken out to make ...

I absolutly HATE being critical. Especially of written work because I know how it hurts. But I do have a thing or two to say, if I may. (hey, that ...

How am I the first review? This should be flocked with positive comments! Its amazing. I can't honestly think of a better word for it. I love how you describe ...

Let me start by saying this is my favorite poem I have read on this site. As a christian, I am so glad there are people like you, writing poetry ...

I like this poem. It made me laugh and nod my head. Honestly, I agree with EVERYTHING in this poem. But since everyone's a critic, here's a point or two; ...

First off, nice poem. Capatalization is fun. You should try it. And this line; "i cant decide what shall i do" You should either make this two seperate lines, or ...

Ok. For starters nice poem. One thing that bugged me is the many referances of how your emotions have to do with your phyisical body (ex. Skin like latex...which by ...

Looking past the poems structure, its meaning could be confusing. See, Im a Christian. Often we are looked down upon for "hating" gay people. But actually, real Christians dont hate ...