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I love this! but one thing, the whole mean girl making fun of her about her being dirty etc.etc seemed a little cliche. Stay away from cliche! this story is ...

Your natural writing is great Sam! just the first part seemed forced and a little itty bitty bit forced at the end and middle. Thats it :-D

I read this, but then I read that you edited with all of their suggestions. I can't comment on this becasue I don't which parts you really wrote or what ...

I really like this poem, very powerful for something so short. I like 'purple mind' that was good. Like all your poems this was very good!

ATTENTION EVERYONE THIS IS AN ADD ON TO PREVIOUS SEGMENTS THATS WHY THIS IS CONFUSING, READ THE OTHER SEGMENTS AND IT WILL MAKE SENSE. THANK YOU THAT IS ALL *puts ...

heehee, I love the drawings the most, I like the style. But i'm not sure what their talking about....thats what makes to so funny....

I like this, but it was to short, and like Dreami said, it reminds me of a poem on a valintine card. But its sweet, I like it.

I really like this, and like Dreami said you just say 'Because' insted of 'becoz' it sounds more qoute-ish ;-)

This reminded me of A Shel Silverstein poem, he is a good poet but the theme you picked didn't match that kind of style; fast and childish.

I agree with arieda, the flow went to fast, and the ryhming seemed forced. And like everyone else said this was a litte cheesy.

Wow, this is amazing. Very beutiful. And I agree with Sam when she says you break away form the YOU GO GIRL! kind of attuide. The rear sheild mirror thing ...

I love this!!! and I agree with TBR, when you pulled in death it gave it a cool twist. P.S bluecows and Duskglimmer you can just look in her profolio ...

I agree with everyone else, you made numerous errors, nothing flowed, nothing had rythem, it was just....uggg. Sorry, but this is a very bad poem.

I have to agree with everone (except nikkle pickle) this was a very lovely poem. Gret job!!!

one thing she's not saying 'egg' she's saying 'ehh' I guess you could say, but I wanted it to be more rough.