Published March 10, 2005
This is a cool beginning... where does it go from there?
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omg...you're gonna keep me up all night reading this story sam....i agree, death is a neccessity in this story...continue the good work
Its good so far, man you have a better use of words than me! And your younger! I really need to start learning in English....
I love this!!! and I agree with TBR, when you pulled in death it gave it a cool twist.
P.S bluecows and Duskglimmer you can just look in her profolio too, for the past stories....
Hehe, nice... somebody got killed! I love it when people get killed because... it just adds a sudden.... death to intrest... nothing more to say... I'm the lazy lady.
sure. just scroll back a couple posts...
I like it, but i wanna know more about luke (is that his name?) and Liberty
you said it was an ad on to an other story, can i see the story?
~blue~
it's an add-on to an existing story...