haven235

What a great start to a story! Your characters and world seem to be well-developed already, and you provide just enough information, not too much, nor too little, to show ...

Firstly, welcome back. Kinda easy to be on/off on anything huh? And now onto the review: Skimmed Cricket's review a bit so that I won't be redundant, but you still ...

Here's a review, as requested! I'll apologize right away: I can't really help you improve this much. I'm not really adept at abstract pieces like this. This seems to be ...

Hey, Jack! I see you've got another idea, and an interesting one at that. Onto the review: Men were always meant to be men. Women were always meant to be ...

An interesting start! The four characters sort of act as foils of one another - Daniel being the heroic one and Andrew the evil one, Stacey the sympathetic and Chloe ...

Whoa. What an interesting twist! The story you've got so far is pretty good, but the start could be more interesting so that other readers will be able to get ...

Thanks for reviewing my piece, so now I owe you one. Honestly, I think you rushed to get this work published. It's evident in the clichés and errors all over ...

All right! Onto the review: So drugs turn people into giant animals, and gangs use this drug as their weapons instead of actual weapons? Hope these animals have special abilities ...

Good start! I really want to know what's going to happen next, and I've got the feeling that the Shade Gang leader's gonna be the main character, Only problems I ...

You've got almost everything fleshed out so far. Your descriptions are really good! You were able to make me picture the setting and characters pretty well. However, I don't think ...

Hey Spotswood, I'm Haven and I hope my opinion helps. Quite a huge chunk of characterization here, but your writing style helped me to get it all in. However, either ...

Hey, again! As I've said, I'm interested to see how your series will go, so...I'm here, and here's a review. Just a couple nitpicks here and there: She stepped up ...

After reading this story, I didn't really feel so sad. In fact, I didn't feel any emotion when reading this. I think it was because of the narrator in your ...

When she entered, it was dark . T he clan was at rest and those important enough to stir at this hour , were busy with duties. She was still, ...

This is a good read. The intro first gave me the notion that your story would go somewhere between the lines of medieval feudalism, but then the actual chapter starts, ...