fruit4you

I like the details, but I seem to have a hard time getting through your sentences. I find myself pausing too much. I understand this was a piece of pure ...

Hello! I find this poem quite interesting. I liked how you labeled each stanza. Reading the number along with the actual poem flowed well, a least to me. It is ...

You were certainly correct when you said this wow have bad grammar. Even though it was on purpose my detail oriented brain focused too much on that part. Beyond grammar ...

Fruit4you here for a review! Okay, for one you can separate your paragraphs more. "Needless to say, Will wasn’t exactly optimistic at the moment. Growing up he had always envisioned ...

Fruit4you here to do a review. Okay, I really love your beautiful descriptions and the way you word your sentences. "It was only 4:54 in the morning when she woke ...

Hello again dear! So with the capitalizing thing, you should be consistent with either capitalizing every line or not capitalizing every line. This one is not as smooth and flowy ...

The no capitizalation gets to me on this poem. Putting that aside though, I enjoyed this poem very much. I also like your nose referencing from your last poem. Also ...

Fruit4you here to review. This is what I'm talking about! The not capitalizing every line works here, and you separated your lines and stanzas perfectly! It was a smooth and ...

Fruit4you here for a review. Okay I kind of can't get over how you structured your poem. That needs to be fixed. Also the flow is off. There really isn't ...

Fruit4you here for a review Ok so capitalize the beginning of each line. Also you separate your lines at weird places, and your stanzas are not separated well. Your writing ...

Fruit4you here to review I feel like this is how the cookie monster would speak. I understand the feeling and like the point of the poem, but I feel that ...

Fruit4you here to review! Wow... I really love this. It is unique and the structure is great. I love how it is a continuous poem that never ends. I was ...

Fruit4you here to review! Very good poem, but a few issues here and there, nothing major. So for one, since most of your stanzas are four lines, I'd separate all ...

Fruit4you here to do a review! So all in all it is good, but your rhythm is a bit off. "That faes were there To catch the terrors before they ...

Fruit4you here to review, Great idea, but your grammar needs serious work. Also, I feel like it reads as a script like piece of work rather than a novel or ...