firepen

Hi trackrunner. I like this poem. It is very short but I enjoyed reading it. It made you think but perhaps you didn't leave quite enough up to the imagaination? ...

Hi Nike, I was drawn to this piece of work because I am called Alice! I think this is good. At times, it is a bit repetitve and lacks structure. ...

Hi Nike, I think, however bare this may be at the moment, it has good potential. Perhaps you could rework it slightly and make it into a poem? I think ...

Hi Persy! I really loved your poem, I think you used great similies and metaphors in it and you really potrayed your Great Grandfather well. I like the variation in ...

Hi wordsandwishes, I love this poem, it made me laugh! I realise that this is spoken, but I don't think there is any need for the speech marks. Perhaps, is ...

I quite like this - it is short but sweet (well...not sweet but you know what I mean!). It has a good concept - the Titanic sinking and I think ...

Hi, I'm firepen. This poem is pretty good. I think it will mean a different thing to each person. I like the way you describe an perfect world, knowing that ...

Hi, I'm firepen. This is a really sweet poem. I think that if you could take out the big gaps in between the lines, that would be really good! You ...

Hi, I'm firepen. This is a very short poem! But short is good. Just in 4 lines, you tell a whole story and really make the reader think! You leave ...

Hi, I'm firepen! I really like the poem! It is very short but that is good. I can really imagine the scene, you have described it very well. I also ...

Wow! This is a great poem! I think you captured bullying very well. When I read the title, I thought it was going to be an actual butterfly and when ...

I wouldn't exactly call it horrible but it is slightly depressing... I like it though. But maybe at the end, you could add a slightly happier verse, to lighten the ...

Hi, I really liked your poem! However, I know that you have said that you've changed the title but I'm going to say that I don't like the new one, ...

I loved this poem. It was very clever and I loved the idea of writer's block. You made me laugh! However, at times, I think the rhythm and rhyme were ...

It's a short poem! I like it though, it rhymes very well. There are a few errors like 'i' instead of 'I'. Also, at the end I don't think that ...