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Heya, Pinkiegirl13! Wisegirl22 here for Team Plasma on Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Day. Here, this wording is a bit weird. Please fix it. "What is the name will be, ...

Hey, Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Day!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Here, you need a comma after "No". "No I don't love you." That will be all. Overall, you need some punctuation, just proofr

Hey, PinkieGirl13! Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Day! Here, I think you should use two sentences. Or a comma. "What the hell are you making out with a sandwich?" Other ...

Hey, Kelpies! Happy Ultimate Pokemon Awesomeness Review Day!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I totally agree with you here. I always wished I would live forever, but then the world would be way too crowded, ...

Hey. Wisegirl22 here for Team Plasma for the win!!!! Here, I think you need a comma after "And", like you did in the other verse. "And girl," That will be ...

Hey. Wisegirl22 here for an awesome review for Review Day. Here, you should have an apostrophe before "cause". "drop everything and run to you cause," That is all for the ...

Hey. You made a typo here. "brushes of all his hate," The last stanza was funny, and I really liked it. You said: "That's why we all love Michael Gove, ...

Um, you are awesome, 'cause I always make parodies of Let it Go, but I also complete them. I advise you, now you don't have song writer's block, that you ...

Hey. Wisegirl22. Here, I think "kindnesses" is a bit weird, and can be fit in as "kindness". "Kindnesses her duty does not dictate -" That's all. I hope you are ...

Hey, FrostArmor! Wisegirl22 here to review. Here, I think the rhyme scheme is a bit weird. "I want to succeed in this life, But my failures are attacking me And ...

Happy Review Day, but I hate Team Aqua. First, a comma right after "me". It’s me Charlotte." I also think this is a run-on sentence. "I know you’re probably wondering ...

Haha, this really fits with the first line. It shows the last line different front everything else. I don't know if you meant to, but that was a good use ...

Hah, great short-story! If you are on Team Aqua, though, I want to crush you... I really liked how you talked about the woman, making us get acquainted with her. ...

He ya, Samus! Wsiegirl22 here for Review Day. Here, bare is spelled wrong. It's not "bear", it's "bare". "slap of bear feet" In the first paragraph, I'm kind of confused ...

Heya, ccwritingrainbow! Happy Ultimate Pokemon Review Day! I think here, you mistake "nineties" for "ninties". "get a job in the ninties" That's all the nitpicks, but if you want you ...