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Hello, ethereal! I notice you kind of have a habit of putting spaces after your punctuation marks. Well, it might work out for you, but it kinda bugs me. Don't ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! I will help you if you need any help, but I think you're fine. If you're confused, though, ask! So, when Dixton enters, a few things ...

Hey ambeezy! I am here to review-obviously. First thing. If the man was drunk, how was he able to threat the little thief so clearly? He should've been slurring and ...

Etherealember, you are one of few who can become a writer and illustrator. I loved how the falcon is spreading its wings like it's flying with courage, hence the name. ...

Sbf1102, hello and welcome to Young Writers Society! Congrats on your...what...first work? I found your first little nitpick a little into the story. After what Ellie said about the Catholic ...

Ickeschr, hello! A late welcome to Young Writers Society for you! :D I like the beginning of your prologue. I seriously do. One thing I should mention, though. You seem ...

Hey, Soulfulwriter. Nice to see ya publishing. I'm obviously here to review, so let's get goin'! You had a strong beginning for a prologue. Just a few nitpicks, though. The ...

Aravis10, hello again! I think you may remember me from my last review on your chapter 1, so no need to introduce myself. Let's get started with this review! As ...

Hello, Aravis10! Nice to see you! I love Egyptian and Greek mythology, and I would've read this sooner if I had known it was about Egypt. Okay, first off. WOW. ...

Hello and good afternoon, RavenMoonStone! I couldn't help but support my team, so here I am! When I saw the words Harry Potter fan fiction I clicked on this, so ...

Hello, CreativelyWritten! As your username tells me, this was creatively written. :D I hadz to too. I really love the second line, how it says "...if you don't fall then ...

Hello, Kelpies! I can't explain something, but I'll do my best. I LOVED THOS POEM OMIGOSH CAN IT BE MORE PERFECT YOU HAVE TO KEEP WRITING LIKE THIS PLEASE PLEASE ...

Hey, musiklover14! I am wisegirl22 congratulating your subscription to the wonderful Young Writers Society! If you need help getting familiar with this site, please let me know, and I will ...

OH MY GOSHIES I CAN'T TELL YOU HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS YOU REALLY PORTRAYED THE TRUE STORY I CAN'T BELIEVE HOW AWESOME YOU ARE YOU REALLY ARE A GREEK ...

Hey, Thewriter13! I'm so glad to see my old friend! I hope you keep writing amazing works and other things! ;) The first line was an engaging opening sentence. I ...