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Hey, reenaHeights! Artemis28 here to review your work, obviously. :D Happy Review Day and go Team Tardis! Let's begin! I didn't find any mistakes until the middle, which is quite ...

Hey, Becky2421! Artemis28 here for the last crucial hours of Review Day. A belated welcome to Young Writers Society, too! I hope you're having a good time on here! So, ...

Hey, BEwriter! Artemis28 here for the last few hours of Review Day! Go Team Tardis! :D So, let's begin. "I", here, should be "I've". "I" doesn't sound right. "Ever since ...

Hello, Vivian! Artemis28 here from Team Tardis. Happy Review Day! :D I was well into the story before I found any mistakes, which is obviously a good thing. In this ...

Hey, Spaulds! Artemis28 here for Team Tardis. Happy Review Day! :D Let's begin! So, first off. When you ask if you're perfect or if anyone's perfect, it should end in ...

Hey, PerksofBeingaReader! Artemis28 here for Team Tardis. Happy Review Day! :) So, let's begin. Why is this girl grinning? I would think she kind of has like, a poker face ...

Hey, BirthdayHangman! Artemis28 here to review. Team Tardis for the win! :D So, let's begin. This song was soooo random. I couldn't find any meaning, nothing I could see. You ...

Hello, Vanilla! Artemis28 here to review your work. Happy Review Day and go Team Tardis! :D Congrats on your first work, too. After the first few sentences, you suddenly switch ...

Hey, Kenzie! Artemis here for Team Tarids. Happy Review Day! So, let's begin. The first two sentences are really weird. What do you mean by "our" night? And why is ...

Hello, Soulkana! Artemis here for Team Tardis! Happy Review Day! So, let's dive in. When you say "despite its been", the phrase sounds kind of strange. I think "despite the ...

Hey, Stranger! Artemis here for Team Tardis... Happy Review Day! I like this! The beginning was cool. Your choice of word was good, when Joe explodes about the difference between ...

Hello, Jupiter! Artemis here for another review! Happy Review Day! :D Let's jump in. So, first of all... demoning isn't a word. Forgive me if I'm wrong, but I don't ...

Hey, Jupiter! Artemis here for Team Tardis! :D So... I think you should have more punctuation other than just commas everywhere. Whenever you're ending a stanza, I think you should ...

Hey, Lorelie! Artemis here for a review from Team Tardis! :D First off. I don't know what the red text is all about. It's just a string of random phrases ...

Hello, TheLearningWriter! Artemis here for a review! Let's go! First off, a nitpick. You don't have to restate the title or who it's by. But you don't have to deleted ...