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Yeah... I can kind of feel the message of the poem right now... But anyway, I felt this poem was extremely broken. It seemed like you placed all that you ...

Whoo. Grif's poetry. ;) So yea, my two cents on it... So I was brought towards my fate, I thanked the lord for what I got, for the maw could ...

It seems just started and not yet revised. Not that that's a bad thing, but there were some mistakes... like your unfinished last sentence. :) I think you should really ...

Since I didn't read the first one, I had to go all the way back to read that one... geez Ari! :) (Seriously, though, the other one was awesome! A ...

I know a girl who really loves music and loves playing her cello. She is extremely good at playing and is very serious about it too, so I know what ...

Okay. There were some parts that bugged me. She smiled and said, "Beauty on the outside is decided by what other people look nice." That sentence didn't really make sense. ...

Hmm.. interesting. It seemed a bit more like a short prose. Yeah, it's narrative, but narrative poems still have flow and rhythm. Most poems have structure too. Not only does ...

To me, it just felt like a string of similar words... but I guess that's what poetry really is, right? I didn't really like it because it just seemed like ...

I don't exactly see what the tied chair has to do with the poem... At first, I thought it was talking about the cruelty of 'you', but then, it seems ...

I didn't find the rhyme really awkward, but I felt like the whole last stanza was an attempt to try to stay rhyming while stick with a meaning. It kind ...

I liked the beginning of the poem, but the rest of it kind of confuses me. Some of the lines and phrases seemed kind of empty, or maybe I just ...

haha I liked it. An interesting take on the whole future-looking-back thing. My only suggestion is to fix some of the spelling typos [little things, like a miss 's' or ...

There were some parts I really did not like, but for the most part, I liked it. Most of the parts I didn't like were forced-to-rhyme lines that didn't seem ...

First, work on adding punctuations/separating sentences so that the story is able to be read more easily. Examples: A fleeting memory had crossed the netherregions of her mind ; she ...

The poem's based on a lot of confusing questions- you're confused and the reader is also confused. I suggest you take out some things that don't seem to fit or ...