Yeah... I can kind of feel the message of the poem right now...
But anyway, I felt this poem was extremely broken. It seemed like you placed all that you wanted to put out as a message in the poem itself. I think you should work on really bringing out the power of your message here. As it is, it just seems really point and blank; it feel likes there could be something more. Hope this helps.
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