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Re: Heard In What He Feared
Huh...that was pretty good! You had a pretty good rhyming scheme going, although some of the rhymes sounded slightly forced. The rhythm is good and the metaphors are quite original. ...
Apr 30, 2010 -
Re: .
Wow! I really liked this! I don't have much to all. I just wanted to know a tad bit more about the character. Obvioiusly he/she has magic, but is it ...
Apr 30, 2010 -
Re: Super Hero Mutants ( SHM) * preface
The scientist had to continue his work, even if it may cost his life, for the sake of the world. He had all the chemicals and atoms in place; all ...
Apr 28, 2010 -
Re: Legion of Superheroes: Heartland Prologue
Goldenquill has most of everything down already. I'd just like to say a few things about your story. It's not bad, but it was had to read. Try spacing it ...
Apr 27, 2010 -
Re: A Shot of Arrogance (Chapter One - Old)
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ “Please Victoria!” Alexander pleaded as his ugly, muddy brown eyes stared into mine. “You don’t under
Apr 26, 2010 -
Re: Pebbles (Edit)
I loved it!! :D :D I can't say that I found anything wrong with it, I liked the chorus best. After you upload it to youtube (if you do of ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: The Torturing Cell
This is a very good piece! The only thing I would have to be picky about is when you said that he hadn't been caught because the children were taken ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: Just 1411 left
I really liked this! As the other said, Skins pointed out most things, but I just wanted to add a bit here. Tigers, though mostly dieing as trophies and for ...
Apr 24, 2010 -
Re: The Darkness of Death
I disagree about iit not being that good! It's a great poem and it's true. I liked it quite a bit and there isn't much you should change. If I ...
Apr 23, 2010 -
Re: Coffee Break (a Poker Face by Lady Gaga parody)
YOU! You have got to be one of the best Parody writers on the face of the planet!! This was hilarious!! The best part is that I know Poker Face ...
Apr 23, 2010 -
Re: Love, Demise and Last Goodbyes ~ Him
Wow!! That was amazing! So sad and happy all at the same time! I would hate to be the girl though... It was such a beautiful story! Extremely well written ...
Apr 23, 2010 -
Re: Till Death Do Us Part
** I remember his strong arms that would wrap me in a hug when I needed it most. I remember his unusual green, hazel, blue eyes that would capture my ...
Apr 22, 2010 -
Re: The Memoir of a Red Envelope
Wow! This was really good! All of the nitpicky things seem to have already been covered. This was different and it made me think of the time I wrote from ...
Apr 21, 2010 -
Re: Apple (Rough)
I really really really liked this! Man, those were good times back in the day when everything was so simple. Stories could be written like this: I am eight. I ...
Apr 21, 2010 -
Re: The Reflection
"LORRIANE, GET UP. YOU GOING TO BE LATE DAMNIT. LETS GO!" Oh boy, just the words I wanna hear when I wake up in the mourning. I fumble outta bed ...
Apr 21, 2010