The Memoir of a Red Envelope

by cherry343

Published April 19, 2010

I knew I was destined for something important, that's what we were made for. We were not the average, no we stood out and reached out to those who received us. I was laying flat on my back, facing the glass of velvety wine, for some reason we get teamed up quite often, I guess humans can't pour their heart out without pouring a glass of wine first. It was quite in the room, my master was rubbing his temples searching deep within for the right words.

He breathed in deeper, took a slug of wine and started to write. His rough hands moving with such delicacy and tenderness. Down, at the pit of my stomach I felt jealous, jealous of who would receive the letter, jealous that he could feel such an emotion that they called "love". Finally he stopped scribbling, hesitated and signed. Taking yet another drink he folded the letter as carefully as if contemplating if he should send it or not. This is where my journey began, sliding the letter in, he closes my top, decorated me with foreign stamps and just like that my bags were packed. Down the mailbox I went and into the world.

Joined by many others, I knew I was to meet many envelopes from all over the world. Some had the same purpose, others was simply a taunting bill-carrier. Each told me their stories, some of grief and death others celebrating joy and birth. We took pride of the emotions we were carrying, knowing that that’s as close as we would get to feel them. I met some so brave they beated their chest like warriors taking on this journey with no fear, but what I had was a beating heart, my master’s heart.

The next few days were but a blur, envelope's faces began to seem all the same, for what we wanted was the same. We yearned to reach our destination. Soon I began to hear exciting whispers of our arrival. Quickly approaching our journey's end we were separated into cities, then into neighborhoods, getting closer and closer.

I would be filled with rapture if I could say that I delivered the letter into her hands, that her face flushed to a deep passionate red. I wish I could say that her heart was beating as fast and as strong as my masters, that my mission, my responsibility was complete. But, I would be lying. One simple tiny organizing mistake changed the course of their lives, I had failed. I was delivered to the wrong address and quickly thrown into the trash. I was lost, and with me my master's heart. A broken dream. A broken heart. A broken little red envelope.

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Hydey
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Hydey wrote a review Review · Apr 23, 2010

What a cute story! I was dissapointed at the end, but that was ententional. :D I liked how you made the letter an actual character. I will never think of mail in the same way.

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TreeHugger12
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TreeHugger12 commented Comment · Apr 22, 2010

Aw, It's soo sweet! Really nice work! Hope to see more of your work around!

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Zibbie
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Zibbie commented Comment · Apr 22, 2010

:) :elephant:
cute story cherry

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eldEr wrote a review Review · Apr 21, 2010

Wow! This was really good! All of the nitpicky things seem to have already been covered. This was different and it made me think of the time I wrote from a pencil's point of view. Of course yours is probably much better than mine... :lol:
It was such a cute little story...well except for the end. Poor envelope :(
But either way it was really good and you should keep writing!

JaneThermopolis wrote a review Review · Apr 21, 2010

I loved that instead of thinking in a human's perspective, you thought of what the letter would think (if it actually had thoughts.) Forestqueen basically pointed out all the nitpiks I had, but otherwise is a very different, unique story. One of my favorite lines was, "I met some so brave they beated their chest like warriors taking on this journey with no fear, but what I had was a beating heart, my master’s heart." I thought that was very well written.
Good job.
-Jane

AtticusGallows wrote a review Review · Apr 20, 2010

I love the angle on this! I'll never think about mail the same way again! :D I think you did a great job with this story, can't wait to read more! :smt005

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cherry343 commented Comment · Apr 19, 2010

Thanks!! ya i tend to forget the comas :S
well hope your envelope accomplishes its mission :)

Forestqueen808 wrote a review Review · Apr 19, 2010

Hello cherry343, Welcome to YWS! I'll be your reviewer for today!

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sliding the letter in he closes my top,
Try: "sliding the letter in, he closes my top,"

Joined by many others I knew I was to meet many envelopes from all over the world.
Try: "I was joined by many others, I knew I was to meet many envelopes from all over the world."

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This was a really good story, it was different, and really made me think. I mean, how many times do enevelopes go to the wrong address? A lot. It really really made me think twice, and the creepy thing was I was just about to send a love letter to someone.... :shock: creepy right? This was a really interesting story! I hope to see more of your work!

~Forest



If a dog will not come to you after having looked you in the face, you should go home and examine your conscience.
— Woodrow Wilson