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Re: I Love My Mom
This is really sweet! I bet your mom loved it! The formatting is a little weird though. Like Micah said, you can separate the similar lines into different stanzas. Also, ...
May 12, 2014 -
Re: Deleted 40
Wow. This is really good! I didn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes, which is good :) I love how you didn't capitalize, to me it just makes everything seem ...
May 7, 2014 -
Re: I am not a novelty
Hi! I'm alive and I'm here to review your poem :) I noticed that some of the lines are capitalized and some are not, even some within the same sentences. ...
May 5, 2014 -
Re: Spagettifacation!!!
Hi! I'm Alice and I'm here to review! Okay so I'm going to copy and paste your poem below and highlight in red some spelling and little errors okay? :) ...
May 1, 2014 -
Re: seven
Hi! I'm Alice and I'm here to review your poem! Can I just say wow... this is fantastic! There was one part that confused me, in the beginning you say: ...
Apr 30, 2014 -
Re: Bruises make for beautiful colors after all
This is a great poem! There were a few spelling errors but that was all I found. "That keeps you both arm and grants you a smile in return. " ...
Apr 29, 2014 -
Re: If There Was No Tomorrow (Chapter 1: Addison)
Wow! This is amazing. I love how you described everything and I really want to know more about Addison and the people she mentioned. Are they her family, friends, neighbors? ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Awakening
Hi! Alice here to review your piece. First, I want to say that this is really good. I like how everything comes together at the end. When you say awaken, ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: i loved you four hundred and seventy days
Wow... This is incredible! There was one thing I noticed, but it's not a huge deal. The part: "because why else would she call the boy that never was besides ...
Apr 24, 2014 -
Re: Why I hate the past tense.
Alice here to review your poem! First off, let me just say, wow. This is a beautiful poem and I didn't find many corrections. I love how it explains everything ...
Apr 22, 2014 -
Re: Cry for me
Hi! Alice here to review your poem :) First of all, I like the poem. It has great metaphors and it describes sadness well. Milanimo said stanzas would help separate ...
Apr 22, 2014 -
Re: I kissed a girl....I wasn't a fan.
I like it! There were a few things I would edit: You change from saying "you walk over" to "She is very drunk or dumb..." I would make it all ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: Pen, Paper, and a Gun - Prologue
Hi! This is a great start! I love mysteries, and I really want to know what's happening. So there were only a few things I would suggest to change: "The ...
Apr 21, 2014