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Re: Brother
Great poem. It was very interesting. I wasn't really expecting to read about a person's love for a brother. I'm guessing that based off of how protective the narrator feels ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: If I Gave You My Heart
Great poem. I liked how it had a clear direction and focus. It has a crystal clear message and I can completely relate to the questions the narrator asks themself. ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: Kitten
This was definitely a very simple and straight to the point kind of poem. It's very different and it's refreshing to read. It's just a loving relationship between a person ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: Infamous Mathematics
This was a unique poem that's for sure. I think that this is a good description of how people detest math. In my opinion, it could have been better if ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: The Lady and the Lady's Song
I adored this poem. I loved your command of diction and the language itself. It all flowed smoothly together perfectly. I think one of my favorite lines would be: "When ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: I can sing it loud
Good job on this piece but I feel like it could use some work. I understand it's about love and a breakup but I did not feel any real purpose ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: Try To Fly
That took an unexpected turn. When I read the title and 3/4 of this story, I was expecting some sort of optimistic, moving ending. It was unexpected but I did ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: The River
Wow that was a really powerful poem. I am very glad that you decided to write this piece. It is very insightful and, I am sad to say, very true. ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: Mom
This is indeed a very insightful, beautiful poem. It was a great way to express such loving feelings toward your mother. She does sound like an amazing person. I'm sure ...
May 7, 2015 -
Re: Daughter, I am sorry
This was definitely very interesting and unusual. But I liked it. It was very descriptive. I definitely had some vivid pictures in my head. I thought that was executed well. ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: A Frost Forest
Right off the bat, I thought this was awesome. It was very descriptive and worded very well. You're obviously very skilled. The beginning caught my attention right away. The ending ...
Jan 4, 2014 -
Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Ten)
Oh my god, this was awesome. I was laughing my face off almost the entire chapter. I don't have a lot to criticize. I think there were some grammar errors ...
Sep 16, 2013 -
Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Nine)
Yes, my questions were answered! I can't believe you wrote this when you were drunk. It's awesome. Don't laugh, or well go ahead, but I'm finding your novel to be ...
Aug 31, 2013 -
Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Eight)
Right off the bat, I loved your descriptions! "he smiles at me to show a set of teeth like piano keys" This was a very good chapter, and my curiousity ...
Aug 31, 2013 -
Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Seven)
I have to say, I enjoyed this chapter. It wasn't my favorite chapter, but it was an important one. I liked how much you revealed about the characters in this ...
Aug 31, 2013
