dragonight9

So glad to see you again :) I hope these chapters have at least elevated Jarid a little in your books. But I wanted to respond to your thoughtful comments. ...

Thanks so much for all your comments! A lot of the things you mentioned were awkward because of lacking context from previous chapters. The 'dark memory' that Shadow was punished ...

I'm probably going to read over the whole fight scene a few times to edit it right. I was so excited writing this that I may have over/under-shared in some ...

This is just the reaction I was hoping for!!! So many theories and questions running through your head as the big battle approaches. I can't wait to read your reaction ...

For your first comment, I think I answered it in the last reply. I'm glad my descriptions of the mental plane are working out. It was something I wasn't sure ...

Some explanations for your questions; I like that you said Surge could be someone to lean on. I honestly didn't think of that while writing so the cannon is that ...

Thanks for your insightful comments! I tried to correct some things and was encouraged by your compliments. As for your comment that Ash's recover is a bit quick... I wish ...

I modified Bellum's explanation of healing Ash's mind. Should be a bit better now. As for the part about Shadow being surprised he would die, I was hoping it would ...

I'm so glad you enjoyed :)

I find it slightly amusing how you have not forgiven Jarid for his earlier transgressions. Though I hope he will find redemption in your eyes later on... I wanted Bellum ...

I really wanted to show how Shadow was being 'corrupted' by Bellum here so I'm glad that came across well. As for why Shadow felt frustrated about Boulder not sharing, ...

Thanks so much for your review! I'll respond to each one as I read them and make corrections based on your comments. For this one, I changed the dream sequence ...

I love all your comments here! I'll try to reply to as many of them as I can. I do admit that 'tasks to complete' is a bit underwhelming. I'm ...

I hope you enjoy ;)

Thanks for the review! To respond to your comment, it is the announcer speaking the lines in the first part. He is reiterating what C.B said for the crowd and ...