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apparently, my pc did the mix up. and .I didn't preview it...i'm surprised myself cos this appeared a whole lot different from what I actually posted...I agree it will make ...

hahaahaha.....this is a jumble of thoughts that is really funny! but there's no need to feel the way you do, i can assure you, there are a lot of people ...

Thanks blue Africa. I'll take heed to your corrections.

Great Work. I have a problem with the structure and capitalization though. It's a nice tribute to those risking their lives for us.

ok. This is a poem of five lines...a quintet...nicely done. It simple and very meaningful. A lot has been said in those five lines. It could be the signature statement ...

Thanks sarebear. Unfortunately, the character Isey Daughan does not have a boyfreind/crush/lover. She has no time to pursue all that. Her one and only love interest is Jesus; and yes, ...

OK. I can already form a melody to this lyric. It's very well written and I know it'll even sound better in a song. Kudos

Nice structure and poem layout. Also the Imagery used there was expository and gave the reader insight as to what insomnia feels like. I really don't see much to criticize ...

Nice poem, just that I don't see the need for the pause effect in the last stanza. Good writing.

The last thing you wrote about your muse...funny. I think the seventh line should be corrected thus; " Where Imagination hides away". That's all. Keep writing.

" My feet pounds the grass under my cleats"; since the first rhyme word is in the plural, cleat should come in plural form too. Good Writing, short but very ...

First of all, Welcome to YWS Headfreakjay. What you wrote is extraordinary. I guess it's about various characters right?. The punctuation and grammar is right on point. Very creative.I'll like ...

Hi dear, I like this. I love the soft tone used and the fact that anyone can understand it. Good work. :)

I like! I found the first poem amusing. I really couldn't criticize anything. Thumbs up on this one.;)