dolwright

I love this piece, simple yet very captivating and full of message. I noticed that you started with the rhyming scheme ABAB in the first two stanzas, and couldn't keep ...

Hi, okay, I'll just highlight the major errors I see here: "You really can't call (I)t crying- some capitalization errors here ...You really can't call It dying.-I don't see any ...

Okay super duper poet, this is amazing! I love the rhyming structure which was fantastic. This is a piece I totally enjoyed reading; though I think there's something you omitted ...

Good Writing! The structure was okay but the rhyming was a bit off. They did not follow a particular pattern. Most of us writers have this problem so I think ...

OK, First of all, I think it would make the poem a whole lot better if you capitalized the first letter at the beginning of every line. E.g: "T(t)here is ...

Hi there, Nice poem. I loved the last stanza. In the fifth stanza, " You try to stay buddy buddy with everyone"; doesn't sound appropriate for this poem and it's ...

Lovely story and very interesting. I would like to point out a few corrections though: " Copper takes time to exam the doll"- "exam" there I beleive should be "examine". ...

I love the storyline, very interesting. Actually I'm a sucker for vampire stories. I also love the way it ended, the dramatic irony used, when you made it all seem ...

I love this poem! Just reading it, it felt like a breath of fresh air and sunshine. I love the imagery used and 'cumulus prison', way to go! I would ...

This is a well-written piece; except that it felt rushed; the paragraphing appeared too clustered, making it less enjoyable when reading. It would do good to put more spacing between ...

Lovely written poem. The first line of the seventh stanza, I think "am" is supposed to be "was": "Before I thought I was a beauty" I like the oxymoron " ...

I love the sequencing of events in each paragraph. I think there is a typo error in the third paragraph, "therefor-e" should have an 'e' right. The imagery is perfect. ...

Perfect. I love the genius (you) who wrote this.Funny, interesting and precise. The beginning and end was definitely on point. 150 target words that made an effect 1000 words wouldn't ...

I like your poem. I share your thoughts on the issue of corruption. When i looked up the topic at first, i thought it was about corruption in the political ...

Hi, overall this poem is not bad. Firstly, these corrections must be made; "it starts a stressed chain of thought"- the 'i' there should be capitalized a 's' after thought ...