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Um...wow...your thirteen? Maybe you should write stuff a little more...well...age appropriate? But since you didn't, your story is pretty well written, with good grammar and enough detail. But its onl

I really liked this poem. I was once told there was an Architect who desired perfection, and built his home out of stars and novas, unconcerned by the petty wars ...

I can’t start on my own, but I can dance and leap and tease and laugh! ((Laugh? I understand the rest but fire doesn't really laugh in anyway.)) I can ...

Acid trickles by the down of her protruded cheeks Synchronising (((Synchronizing))) with flood from her chain-sawed wrists.(((Do you mean her wrists are sawed off?))) Externally weak, she stances and

Hi. This is good. Stanza would help it be easier to read and it would look neater. Also capitalization and grammar could use some fixing up. "But you be miles ...

Soul! I loved this! Post more! "but I had the advantage of being far better with warding " Just wondering, did you mean wording? Other than that I have no ...

Love it. its truely awesome

Okay, I already told you that I thought this was awesome in a awkward kinda way so I decided to review. :P Because when I started reading this I had ...

I really liked this. I love the way you started this 'I am a happy death man' You can really see the emotion in this. I wish I could hear ...

I really like this. It seemed deep and I also liked the repetition. Unlike smashless, I like the way the lines are written. My favorite part was "something's up, so ...

Hey! I liked this! Okay in the ninth line it's should be its You should break your poem into stanzas it would be easier to read but, personal preference. This ...

Hey! I liked this! Okay in the ninth line it's should be its You should break your poem into stanzas it would be easier to read but, personal preference. This ...

Hi! Okay so maybe a capital H in heart for the first line? My favorite line was 'Breathing isn't thought of in death' Overall I liked it and everyone else ...

I like this, expessically the last two lines.

Llama) Periods, capitalization, spelling errors, commas, and chatspeak. Other than that I loved it. The idea was great, though slightly hard to read. But I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVED the over all piece. ...