What am I?

Hi there. I was going to do a review of this sooner, but I didn't expect there would only be one review of this piece. So I'll try my best.

Right from the bat, I sort of liked this piece. I like the language, the empthasis and how you have used literary techniques. So, let's take this review step by step. Let's analyse everything in order.

"I can’t start on my own, but I can dance and leap and tease and laugh!
I can only live for as long as I can breathe;
I’m wild in movements and spirit.
I’m always turning and dropping and rising and cackling!"

This stanza seems very sarcastic, as you have used an exclamation mark quite a bit. Whether this was your intention or not is beyond me, but to me it seems a bit too gleeful for the character to be seriously thinking these thoughts. Or maybe this is a dramatic poem.

"I’m seductive, loud, strong, passionate, and stubborn.
Nothing can knock me down.
Everyone admires me from a distance,
but I don’t like to be touched or I’ll go into a rage!"

I'm not too much into this stanza, especially compared to your last. While the other was more about personal emotions, this one deals with other people. I woul have loved to have seen a continuation of the first stanza, to explain why they feel this emotion. I like how you contrast the stanzas, though. I don't like your ending with rage. It sounds a bit too unsubtle for my liking.

"No matter how long I live
or how many times I die,
I will always be resurrected,
even on my former ashes."

So this person is....immortal now. I'm a little confused. I thought for a minute this was symbolic of something else but........I can't see it.

"What am I?


Fire"

Now, what's up with the spaces? It kind of comes across as a little bit.....well, a bit random and it doesn't seem to incorporate itself to the main themes. If you are fire, why feel stubborn? I personally can't see the connection.

Overall, a bit flawed, but decent.

I can’t start on my own, but I can dance and leap and tease and laugh! ((Laugh? I understand the rest but fire doesn't really laugh in anyway.))

I can only live for as long as I can breathe; (( I am possibly wrong, but this should be a comma?))

I will always be resurrected,
even on my former ashes. ((I really liked this part.))


I liked your poem. Its riddle style was awesome. I like the personification you gave to the fire.

I can’t start on my own, but I can dance and leap and tease and laugh! ((Laugh? I understand the rest but fire doesn't really laugh in anyway.))

I can only live for as long as I can breathe; (( I am possibly wrong, but this should be a comma?))

I will always be resurrected,
even on my former ashes. ((I really liked this part.))


I liked your poem. Its riddle style was awesome. I like the personification you gave to the fire.