Published July 14, 2012
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Acid trickles by the down of her protruded cheeks
Synchronising (((Synchronizing))) with flood from her chain-sawed wrists.(((Do you mean her wrists are sawed off?)))
Externally weak, she stances and waits for the silence to finish her off. (((I really like this line)))
Inside;(((maybe a comma would go better?))) alone and caged it beats mechanically but without purpose- (((You mean her heart?)))
The tempest erupts, raging, exploding; attacking all she was worth.
Looking down, I see the monster in a shattered reflection (((So its her?))
Okay I really liked this poem but it left me with a lot of questions.
Hey Amie!
Don't really understand the plot, but this is paced nicely and your spelling and grammar are very good! Good job!
~Shady