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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Mary Jane

    I really liked this poem a lot but I am not completely sure what is going on. Maybe that is the point. My favorite lines are "To falling Beats of ...

    Sep 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Love lost

    Most poems usually have some type of scheme. This doesn't seem to have one, or I could not find it. Its really not a bad thing, I hardly ever have ...

    Sep 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Street Lamp

    I think this poem is great. A sentinel of sorts, head bowed to the darkness, that was my favorite line. I am a little confused what the sentinel is doing ...

    Mar 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: There's more to life than this

    I enjoyed reading this. I like the message you are trying to send, or at least the message I interpreted from the poem. I think that it could flow better, ...

    Mar 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: A nice winter swim

    I think is poem is good but it could be SO Much better. I feel that I understand your poem but you could have used different, more descriptive words that ...

    Mar 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Getting it

    I like what you are writing about. I enjoy thinking about things like too. But the flow of the poem is not to hot. Its really repetitive during some parts ...

    Mar 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Autumnal Night

    I really enjoyed the poem. Your use of vocabulary is quite amazing. I agree with Anna. I did not think that the word Tarnish flowed well. When I was reading ...

    Feb 17, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Gratitude..

    It was a good poem! the only thing that bothered me was this line: "you never left when i am down" maybe you mean you never left when i was ...

    Dec 6, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: on love; you imparticular

    I think its a very cute poem. I'm not entirely sure whats going on, maybe if it was longer you would be able to explain better. my favorite part was: ...

    Nov 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Rumors

    This is really good, I like it a lot. The rhymes don't sound forced, which is good. But I was wondering what happened to them? Why do they disappear in ...

    Nov 27, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Reading Your Mind

    I really liked this poem. I thought it was interesting and it soothed my mind in a way. Im not totally sure if I understand it, but i like it. ...

    Nov 26, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Tears

    This is a nice poem. Some rhymes felt effort less like the one in the 3rd stanza. But most of the other rhymes felt forced. I wasn't really sure what ...

    Nov 26, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Thinking of you

    I think it is a very cute poem! I totally get the story. And i know at the beginning you analogized about not having any imagery. I disagree with you ...

    Nov 24, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Sleep

    It was a good poem. But I didn't really connect with your character. And in the 10th like where it says "I see a something." Do you mean to have ...

    Nov 23, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: cal's sentient city contest

    I thought it was good. Your great at descriptions which is great because if you cant describe something then you have nothing. But what kept bothering me was when i ...

    Nov 23, 2008


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