carelessaussie13

Hey there! While I see the appeal of the poem and the woman of darkness, I think you could take this to a whole new level with a bit of ...

I disagree with Snoink. I think you've got a bit of s Shel Silverstein thing going on here. Funny, light-hearted, but at the same time an expression of your frustration ...

Hmm. I mean, Hi! Review time! It's clear that a lot of emotion went into your poem, so I don't want to appear insensitive when I say that it could ...

hey there! Um, I actually disagree with dancingclouds on the underlining/italics thing. Every time I hit either one of them I had to scowl and think, "Seriously?" before I went ...

Hi there! I'm going to be reviewing your poem today... Here's the thing: I didn't care about the little girl. You kept telling me she's sad, she's pessimistic but not ...

Hi! I'm going to be reviewing your poem today... One word (to be followed my several other words): Clarify. My fingers are blistered from the strings, though they seem to ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I'll be reviewing you poem today... Basically, I agree with the things Selin said about 'before I begin...' not leading to a beginning. I just ...

Hi! I'm going to be critiquing your peom today... First of all, wow! Are you really ten? Because good on ya for writing such wordy stuff so young! Second of ...

Hi. Oh my gosh. I really liked this. I mean, I really, really liked this. About halfway through this I realized I was totally focused inward, and your poem did ...

Hey there! Okay, so I know I hate it when people go all "Rule Number One" on me, but I'm gonna go "Rule Number One" on you because I think ...

Hey there. I have some issues with your poem, but let's start with the good news. Ready? It was beautiful. Really beautiful. I loved the imagery; I read it twice ...

Hey there. I really iiked this. It's not often that a poet will go out of the frilly, lacey, flowy style and still get across a message. You've done it. ...

Hey there. I read your poem. Want to hear what I think?? :-) Your rhyme was very forced and your rhythm was kind of . . . well, not there. ...

Hey there. I don't' believe we've met. I'm carelessaussie. It's a thing. Anyway. Things I liked: I liked the way you could interpret anything you wanted from the words there. ...

Hi there! I read your poem. Here's what I have to say about it: It read a little bit like an essay for a history class or something. LIke, Introduction: ...