captain.classy

I liked your poem, but there are some words you used that seem off and don't flow. "Whilst" where you have it makes the whole line seem like a blast ...

Boo! Ha, sorry but this made me mad! Every other chapter is so full of description and passion and in this one, you just rushed through. I was really sad ...

I thought this was good. I mean, I've read poems about variables before, but whatever. I really liked how you didn't repeat 'so let the number be x' or mention ...

That...movie...was...so...sad! Anyways, I liked this, thought its not very original. Your fist line is about as cliche as it goes. It's hard to write original poetry because so many things ...

You see the long lines that go all the way to the far right of the page? Well, since some lines are short, you need to split those up. It ...

I didn't think "The sun is beginning to rise as I type was part of the poem. But, I think it a pretty line, and goes well in your poem. ...

At first I was all, "How old are you?" Then, by then end, you had moved me. This was so adorable! I feel like it has actually happened to me, ...

Of course right now you can't tell what has happened to the sister. We know something has happened, though, because how would it be a story without it. I think ...

Hiya! And that’s what I told myself. And if Catherine ever did get around to asking, that’s what I would tell her. So this is the only thing that bugged ...

I don't have much to say about this poem. It may just be me, but I absolutely hate short lines like these. I think you should make the lines longer. ...

Help me think of a title, maybe? Maybe the best title for this piece it 'lack,' or some variation of the word. You seem to be talking of what the ...

As I stare into your eyes, which are the color of the open sea. Okay, so I agree that comparing hte eyes to the ocean is cliche. Try taking more ...

This is something i randomly started writing last night, it's not finished and not sure what to make of it but any criticism and/or help would be appreciated. Hopefully enjoy. ...

Ha! I really like this. I am actually scared for the twins! I am wondering about Mr.Mosby, and if he is one of the culprits... I think that is what ...

Hiya! But as far as I'm concerned, This is the only line I found not to flow. There are too many syllables compared to the other lines. Maybe you could ...