bubblewrapped

I'm sure you're tired of hearing this, but I LOVE this poem. The whole things. Utterly. Especially the title, which is what drew me to it in the first place. ...

Interesting...not the kind of rhyme scheme I would personally have chosen, but it works. I like the first two verses OK but in the third you changed the rhyme scheme ...

Once again, I love it. How do you do that? Maybe a minute amount of polishing to be done in the though... The lights in the city always go out ...

Awesome! Seriously, I loved this poem - I'm not sure why, but it 'tickled my fancy' as they say, lol. Like wine, there is something in this poem that lurks ...

I agree, it was kind of abrupt in places. But its an effective abruptness, and does nothing to detract from the poem itself. Blue eyes Watch They sparkle Delighted At ...

:? :shock: OK, that was...odd...hilarious, but odd. I love the last line especially, and I definitely agree that sometimes poetry needs to be light as well as dark...or at the ...

Yes, I agree with Firestarter - very thought-provoking. It does need some work, however, in my opinion. I walk through the Hall The Hall of 100 Mirrors. In each one ...

I know what you mean about not wanting to touch a piece once its finished...its kind of like painting, I guess. Dont want to ruin things! I'm trying to get ...

Interesting...I cant personally say I liked it but that is only my opinion based on emotion not reason hehe. Its actually quite a good poem. Lying there, in the grass, ...

Beautiful! Simply beautiful. I've read this poem several times but never had time to comment on it, so I will now :) Elegant. (

WOW. Seriously, I am blow away. I love this poetry and this particular type of poem - particularly the run-on stream-of-consciousness thing you have going. Dont change a thing. I ...

Its actually pretty good - especially for a 2am-poem lol (I know what those can be like...[shudders] I wish they all turned out so well hehehe). It reminds me of ...

Definitely a powerful (if depressing) poem...I particularly liked the ending, like Nate said, a real shocker. Makes you do a double take and reread it all over again in a ...

Right now, its not incredible. No worries, though, coz it definitely has potential ;). There are some good places and some not so good but overall I really enjoyed it. ...

Wow. Awesome poem, a lot of emotion and depth. Well written too, although slightly stilted in places. Definitely very powerful - particularly loved the last stanza. "how can you love ...