bubblewrapped

Personally I loved the last stanza - I like the way it goes from a sort of free-fall to sharp and savage (good word Amice!). But the actual ENDING part, ...

I just gotta tell you, I love your avatar. It's hilarious! :lol: Unfortunately (dont hate me!) I dont feel the same way about your poem. Everything is not clear- there ...

Beautiful. Nice to know I'm not the only one who gives writing as presents (to parents, anyway) lol. My only nitpick (other than supporting what everyone else has said, except ...

One little thing - you mean, "bade"? Otherwise, it just has, you know, a dog howl connotation, and that just doesnt seem to fit... :wink: Otherwise, very...different. I loved the ...

I loved it the first time. Shakespearean. Beautiful analogies and wonderful language. The second version...well, left a lot to be desired. The first verse was OK, but it didnt fit ...

Loved it. I only have a few criticisms in the last stanza: I wield power, and I watch it dissaper between my fingers.

I loved it. Lots of imagery (subtle, but there). At least, it gave me plenty of mental pictures and a vague sense of understanding. Once again, cant resist your poetry, ...

*first-reviewer-dance* Mmm well I liked it - you did a good job with the whole thing but...Oh, I dont know. I sometimes get the feeling (and please dont take this ...

Whee, first-review-dance!.... :oops: **ahem*** Yes. Well, I really liked it Chevy :D . Glorious. A few minor bits that itched though; add water to the ocean just to watch it ...

Have to say I liked this one...you can hear the "but" coming, cant you?...BUT it just doesnt sit right with me. Lets see if I can tell you why. I ...

Well, afraid I have to disagree backgroundbob, though most respectful tippings of the hat to your opinion, etc. etc. I dont think this is your usual run-of-the-mill angst at all. ...

Mmmm...well, I liked it, but it kinda felt pointless to me, you know? Maybe I'm not connecting properly since I never was what you'd call a social person at sixteen, ...

And that is exactly why...that - what I mean to say is, like other words... Never mind. I wont even bother trying to form a coherent response to that. Once ...

Personally I like YA novels, mostly because they ARE light and fluffy, and since I'm usually really busy I dont have the time or patience for an involved storyline. I ...

I really enjoyed it. The slow creeping rhythm made it weird and mysterious in a creepy, gothic, horror-movie way (and I say that as a good thing). The only part ...