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I like this too: "Despite this radiant beauty,/All pales compared to you." They do need some work, but good job at the rhyming. Try something a little different, a different ...

I like it, but I do agree the last line isn't that good, but it could be. Just change it a bit.

I loved it! It was freakin' awesome! Really good with some attitude, and it was something I could really relate too. REALLY relate, haha, I never break up wit people, ...

I agree with everyone, it's very good. (I got it to work, so I can comment!) I really liked it, really awesome. Good job! "India, India, India!" - The Master ...

Thanks everybody! (Again)

Thanks everybody! :) I didn't really like this poem, but I'm glad you did. And I agree, it does need some work, but this is my first poem that's actually ...

It was just about enojoying nature and life. I meant to make the reader think of their inner child, like when they were young and innocent, not tainted by the ...

Thanks wolfman, and I've been thinking about it, but I haven't decided yet. Any ideas?

I love it! Deep but brief. Sweet too. Good job! :D

I really liked it, it reminded me of the mistakes I've made with the people I loved, so it was a bit of a downer for me, but that's alright. ...

I liked it, something I could relate to. It was clear, not something you could easily NOT understand, there were a few grammer errors, but otherwise, pretty damn good. Haha, ...

Are you okay dude? If not, please don't do anything you'd regret! I have, and I've found it's not worth it. But, I love this poem. It's sad, tragic, and ...

I loved it! It was something I could relate to and was kind of sad, and just good. I find nothing wrong with it at all. So, good job.

It's really cute, but I agree it needs some more work. It has a nice idea, and it does ryhme, but that isn't everthing. Work on it a little bit ...

I really like it. Very meaningful and emotional, kind of. Good idea, though.