braydog25

Hi there just wanted to say a few things about the story, first of all its got a lot of potential to be not just a good story but a ...

Hey mate im back again :). This chapter is another quality chapter I must say its a bit boring in places but the boring places are understandable. Isabelle and Ben ...

wow this story was deep, I was very moved by the story content and was left eager for the next chapter. I love the fact you've left out the backstory ...

nice chapter mate im loving how the story is developing. Isabel as red death perfect. overall it seems though Bens going to have to chose wisely who he has on ...

Wow that chapter was great I loved how Isabelle has turned into something Ben dislikes, I have a feeling though that there is a logical explanation for this that your ...

Great review of a good series i'll start by saying that it certainly looks like you've covered all the criteria for the essay. The only thing I'd say about this ...

I have just read both chapters and I can say that both chapters are polar opposites of each other, the first chapter was a little fake and then this chapter ...

For the topic your talking this was probably a little long, although that may just be my personal taste. You went on a little bit to much about the scenery ...

Good poem yes I like it lots, I like the metaphor that you've used comparing friends to puppy dogs. Also starting the different stanza with the same line my spirit ...

Interesting story first of all you've made some minor grammer errors such as forgetting to put the apostrophe in she'd, at times I struggled to keep up with details of ...

Really good story this seems similar in some ways to a story im writing at the moment called KAC with the difference being im trying to play the assassins as ...

Now that was a great chapter that caught my interest a lot more than the last chapter, that chapter was a lot better in terms of the content level. There ...

Wow what a great start to story I love the direction you seem to be going with this story my only qualm is the lack of resistance from lia in ...

Interesting story i have now read both the prologue and chapter 1 and i must say that the prologue was strange it left me at times with some question as ...

interesting poem i enjoyed the depressing side to the poem the only real critism i had with this poem was i was expecting it to be more about a bird ...