"I'm lost..." A soft voice spoke. A girl about sixteen years old with light blue eyes and long wavy blonde hair that lays right on her lower back was walking in darkness. "Kira you promised you'd stay with me..." The voice spoke once more, the girl sat down watching her hands which was consumed in the darkness around her, "you disappeared so quickly I can still see your blood on my hands!" She cried tears hitting the palms of her hands, "where will I go now that your lost forever? Are you still alive or did you die in misery? You ran away as soon as you saw me...I thought you'd know I'd follow you..." She was still alone, silent and scared. "What are you hiding Kira? what is it your involved with and wont let me help..."
My name is Violet, I am sixteen years old and I'm looking for Kira; my sister. Our story started way back, how I got to be alone, in the consuming darkness. It started on my sixteenth birthday four weeks ago. There was a war all around us, near us and even within ourselves; my sister needed to hide before she was found; someone like my sister would add a powerful advantage to any side, but Kira refused to leave until after my sixteenth birthday arrived; to see if I too would get power. She was to take me with her if I gained my gift, my power anything that seems unnatrual, but nothing, nothing at all came to me. Mom refused to let her take me, saying I would only be put in danger; Kira is all I've ever had growing up. My brother, Tyler, was in war and has been since I was little. They found out about his powers one day during training, his gift, his power whatever you want to call it, came in early while the soliders where on there way to a nearby town to collect more men for battle. I remember the day so clearly, its a pain that will never go away, they took him when he was only ten years old. They don't know who we are and they honestly don't care how young we are either. Kira hated mom ever since she said that, I have no choice in what I want; being the youngest of eight, Kira was the oldest, and then it was Tyler. The rest of my family where only step-members of the family. Besides Me, Tyler and Kira, the rest where safe from the war unless taken in by their age, but soldiers tend to steer clear of Wisps town. I would have been safe if I never ran away. I left shortly after Kira, I had no reason to stay! Tyler was gone and we don't know if he's even alive or not, Kira was gone, might as well leave too. Soon all my steps will leave while I'm alone to worry, to be trapped in my own world of darkness for two years.
"Kira, please help me, the memories they're killing me..." My soft voice played. I was sitting there alone, still as I watch the memories play over again in my head, "all those years you where all I've ever had, Tyler left when I was only four. Were are you now when I need you most!" I screamed as I slammed my fists into the ground eye's flaring a deep red, "maybe I should let them find me and join them, to join Tyler where ever he might be. Kira!" I screamed my sisters name, and instantly regretted it. My power showed and now I see why my powers came in late; I was something worse then my family, this was no gift, but a curse instead. Something created out of all pain and sadness that I had suffered. My dad dying when I was four, my brother taken when I was four into war, and war starting when I turned four. All that delaying my power, turning me into something worse, something dark.
Soldiers saw power and watched with awe, as they watched my eyes flare red, the magic swimming around me in a bubble, like a protection. I gave off a unwelcoming aura, that made the soldiers fear me.
"Kira, this creature I've become, its because of you...Now I join Tyler in war, maybe in death. I'll say hi for you if he's alive." My voice came out in echos of itself, soft and melodic, "if only you never left me, maybe I would still be me...bye Kira if you see mother again, tell her I said bye and that I'm sorry, that I'm with Tyler now." I was being tied down and bonded, captured like a beast, like a monster.. I gave up fighting what I believed was fate. "Goodbye Kira." I whispered softly soon passing out.
~dreams of you again~
"Violet! Hurry up or we'll be late for workout!" A tall fair skinned girl laughed as a young small girl tired to hurry and catch up with her sister.
"Kira! Wait for me! Kira!" Tears ran out Violets eyes and she ran getting caught in thorns and smacked by branches. Kira soon stopped as Violet ran into her legs. She seemed distant now, like something was there, but wasn't. "Kira?" Violets voice was soft and scared, she had been crying and was covered in cuts and burns. Kira turned and picked her up hugging her close.
"Violet, practice has been canceled for the day." She said softly to Violet. Violet was confused and was just wanting to see Tyler at practice. They where nearing the middle of the forest now, where there equipment had been laid out and ready to use, but Tyler wasn't around; and that made Kira worry even more. "Tyler!" She yelled and yelled, but nothing. "Tyler!" She yelled again, but still nothing. Kira started crying as she called out Tyler's name, after a little while a faint sound came too.
"Shush Kira, you'll wake Sapphire." Tyler said as he came out from the trees smiling at Kira, who was now furious. "Kira, are you alright? Something happen? Kira..." She stood in silence watching Tyler for a good moment then she yelled, screamed, what ever possible thing she could do to let her anger out.
"Dad just died, and your worried about some pet dragon that we shouldn't even have! You need to grow up Tyler stop being a little kid, stop thinking about yourself!" She yelled at him. Tyler stumbled back staring at Kira's red face staring him down. "The fact you didn't feel the disconnection to begin with is most upsetting! You where supposes to train yourself to feel when one of your family members are hurt or gone! Grow up!" Tyler was devastated, destroy and now furious himself. Tyler was the closest one to their dad, he didn't feel the disconnection between him and his fathers life.
"Your lying Kira! He's not dead, I didn't feel his life go, I still feel his energy in me, his connection! Stop lying about such things! Just go! Leave!" He screamed and fire surround him. His anger took over and the fire's of his fear, his pain and his anger consumed him. Violet's heart shattered watching the pain. She struggled free from her sister and ran to her brother, but once she reached him, soldiers grabbed her and started to pull her away from him.
"Bubba!" She screamed out to him crying, kicking, and screaming. Tyler broke out of his anger towards Kira and aimed it towards the people in cameo. "Bubba please! Help!" She screamed again, reaching for her older brother.
"Violet! Let her go!" He yelled grabbing at the soldiers, ripping there heads off, tearing at their very insides. Grabbing his sister and holding her tight. "Violet, run..." He was cut off when they snatched her away and threw her at a tree, she struggled. Her legs where in pain, her heart ached for her brother. "Violet! Run!" and she did just that, crying with pain, running with fear. Kira left her and Tyler, Violet was alone, running trying to find home again. She listened to the forest around her, nothing, not even the sound of fear except her own. Where was Kira now, why would she just leave with everything going on.
My dream faded away as I opened my eye's, a burning pain stung them. As I tried to gain focus a faint voice spoke to her, or she thought anyway, Violet wake up. The voice was deep but it seemed closer then a whisper like I could move, but it would follow. I sat up looking and feeling around, I couldn't see anything, but the surface was rough scaly even. I blinked around looking for a face, or snout even. Yes Violet its me, your protector, Sapphire. My eye's water its been twelve years since everything happened, Sapphire was the one who found me trapped in branches that day.
"Protector, what do you mean Sapphire?" I asked softly so not to stir up the peaceful air around me, for once I felt at home. I didn't fear this darkness, probably because I knew someone was with me, watching over me. After moments of sadness I started crying curled up against the scaly body. Sapphire wrapped her tail around me and pulled me beside her. I didn't realize how tired I was, how mentally and physically exhausted I was. "Sapphire, how did you find me?"
Just like I did before. You called for me in your screams, you speak the language of the dragon young Violet. Your gift is intertwined with the dragons that fly, your heart is one with mine, just like your father. Sapphire snorted gently and started a fire, I was wearing nothing but a towel, I was soaked and cold. You where covered in blood and soaked by the river. Your father has taken them to be cleaned and dried for you. My eyes went wide, my mind was spinning, throbbing screaming out for answers.
"But Papa died. That's what started this mess, why Tyler is gone. Papa is dead." Unlike Kira and Tyler she never learned to connect with the family, because everyone was gone no one could teach her. How could she believe Sapphire after everything she went through everything she saw, but something was telling her it was true. Tear spilled from her eyes, "Papa..." she said softly.
If your father was dead, I would have been dead myself. He couldn't die, so he ran to get help for himself, he couldn't die because of you. You and your dad have a strong connection, just like you and Tyler. The way you fought for him, to get to him. You are connected to them both, they both live inside you, they are part of who you are. No matter how far they are. My heart was beating faster then normally as a figure stepped into the fire light, holding a stack of cloths. Papa...
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Hi there just wanted to say a few things about the story, first of all its got a lot of potential to be not just a good story but a great story the plot is interesting and you left lots of gaps and cliffie in the story to hold tension and make the reader want more i really liked this.

The one problem i had with the story and almost turned me off reading it was the constant changes of point of view you go from talking in first person to talking in third person and its real confusing because of this fact
really good start
Okay, the story is good. Proof reading is a needed aspect of the story. The story, in parts, are confusing and needs to be clearer. In the aspect of all of it, it's good. I like the idea, truly, but what needs to be done is more explanation. You describe a lot, that's good, but it's like you're trying to shove it all at once... Again, just clean it up and it has a lot of potential.
Keep it up, I'd like to see this at it's best.
I really loved this. It's really exciting and I'm hoping to get more soon! Just remember to proof read you work (ugh I sound like my teacher!) because some doesn't seen to make sense:
She stood in silence watching Tyler for a good moment then she yelled, screamed, what ever possible thing she could do that her anger out.
You need to grow up Tyler stop being a little kid, something thinking about yourself!" She yelled at him.
I thought it was interesting that you did a play on 'be careful what you wish for' when Violet gets her power. I also liked that your showing the innocents who get hurt by war rather than those fighting it. I'm wondering if the dragon plays a significant part if the plot.
But brilliant job and please keep writing (don't leave me on a cliffhanger!)
Thank you very much, I know I need to go back through I and proof read, I didn't mean to publish I was in a rush running late for my next class and hit publish by mistake. I will be fixing it soon though and will finish out the chapter.
Can't wait