blueRaven2239

The joy in the world it does pervert, With this part I don't really understand what you are trying to say. Other then that I really liked it and I ...

"Eating something like that isn't (AS)terrible as a wolf, but for you it mint be a bit too pink. You'd probably (BE)fine, but I'd still let it cook for another ...

This is a very nice poem it provokes emotion and is very nice to read. I liked the idea that you have portrayed in this poem, Also Because I am ...

But all I saw myself as a zero. I would personally rephrase that cause I didn't fully understand it. Other then that one thing I think it is absolutly beautiful ...

This is good it needs some work it seems a little depressing but I don't know maybe that's what you wanted. I really like the begining but the rest is ...

This song should be written in song form also it needs punctuation so that people know how to sing it in their head to get a rythem. also I think ...

This is an amazing song it's really good. The only things that I see wrong is your capitolization in your I's and at the beginings of sentences there isn't much ...

where there's no boy and girl I would do boy or girl instead but that's just me. what I've tried and tried to find in the back of my head... ...

You need to capitalize your letter in the begging of sentences and add proper punctuation marks at the end of your sentences. When you think of me am I the ...

I love the phrasing I think there could've been more effort put into some of the parts. also in some parts I couldn't understand what you where trying to say. ...

I thought I saw you walk into the store From the rain, you came soaking wet. It was seventeen minutes to four, And you hadn't spoken yet. If it where ...

When I started talking to your "enemy." who's the enemy I can't tell personally is it a second girl or boy I can't very well tell. there are a few ...

And pout in her selfie all time I would put ALL THE TIME not just all time. also there are a few I'S that are lower cased when they should ...

(Chorus) Darkness’ Silhouette, Darkness’ Silhouette, Darkness’ Silhouette, It’s what I see it’s what I see I think with this chorus you could add more to it and seeing that it ...

On the floor where sun rays glow Like sand.... I cry like a mad is better like this On the floor where sun rays glow Like sand.... I cry like ...