I love this. The general sense of panic you capture here is spectacular. This poem brings to mind another poem by John Keats called, "When I Have Fears That I May Cease To Be." Additionally, the rhyme scheme adds a lyrical feel to the poem, which makes it all the more haunting. I also love the fact that you chose not to edit it, so as to keep the integrity of the moment and mainframe in which you wrote it. That to me says a lot about the raw emotion of the poem. This is fantastic. Keep writing.
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