bludragon525

Hey! Awesome job! There's just a few things I'd like to point out. The Characters: You need to include a little more detail about Thorn. Thorn, as of now, feels ...

I'm addicted to the Percy Jackson series.... Rick Riordan did mess up a lot of the Greek myths, but he mostly got them right. I've been reading the greek myths ...

Hey! I liked this. It's simple, easy to read, maybe not terribly powerful, but good all the same. You need to add some punctuation in. It will be a lot ...

Hey!!! Wow. Great job, once again. Okay, couple of things. Suggestions mostly, nothing much. “You were asking me something, but I…I have some questions of my own.” His eyes shifted ...

Hey! I liked this! Again, you had a few grammatical errors, but nothing serious. I don't think you're including enough details about your three characters. I know basically nothing about ...

Hey moonstar! I liked your beginning. You could have added a few more details about the acting part, but otherwise, you did a fairly good job. "Hello?" oh no, I ...

Hey! This was a bit confusing. You're showering us with too many images, and the reader can hardly connect to this piece at all. Things to think about: 1) Meaning. ...

Hey! Okay, have you read the rules yet? If you haven't, I would suggest reading them, since you just broke one. Moving on.... You had a lot of both grammatical ...

Hey! I loved this poem! You had a great idea and imagery, and I loved how you got everything to rhyme well. You had a few awkward parts, but octocoffee ...

Hey! Great job! You had an awesome idea, and a good imagery. I loved both your beginning and your end. the light fireflies leave behind when they cut through. Okay, ...

Hey moonstar! I liked this. You had a great plot and a good imagery. You had a lot of grammatical mistakes. You spelled a ton of things wrong, and you ...

Hey! Nice poem! You had a lot of emotions packed into it, which flowed rather nicely. If I knew I'd fly away Personally, I would change it to, "If I'd ...

Hey dogs! This whole idea has been overused way too many times. If you really want to make it unique, add your own little twists and turns to it. Express ...

Hey! I liked your poem. It had a great imagery, and a brilliant ending. Okay, on to the review part... Those taunting words of others Those taunting words of others ...

Hey! I like this. You have a really good idea behind it, but it still could use a little bit of work. You scream with pleasure, “Oh, what a treat ...