bludragon525

Hey! I like it. It's the sort of desperate poem that I love once in a while, and for the most part, it was great. I know you were aiming ...

Hey, winterbaby. Sorry if I'm harsh, but Catcher in the Rye is one of my favorite books, and I had to study it very closely during English last year. I'm ...

Hey! First off, I love the descriptions. They provide great imagery, and I could picture the troll quite clearly. Just have a couple of nit-picks: We slowed down to a ...

Hello! I just have a few nit-picks that Kiara missed. standing on tables and signing Christmas carols in the middle of June become the norm after a while. I assume ...

Heyo! You have a very sweet idea, and this poem has a lot of potential, but try to add more detail! Your poem at the moment is somewhat cliche, as ...

Hey T. Overall, it's not half bad. You've got some grammatical and spelling errors, but the plot was interesting and the characters were great. First of all, try breaking up ...

Hey GoldenQuill! This was fabulous. The short chapter you gave us was utterly captivating, and it was written with ease, something I rarely find anymore. I couldn't find anything wrong ...

Hey! First off, this was fabulous. Your descriptions of your emotions were beautiful and clear, and it was a very fun piece to read. Nit-Picks There he is, walking towards ...

Haha, this is awesome! I can't wait to read the other 100 gruesome tales of death. This was really short, as everyone before me has pointed out. Flesh it out ...

Heyo! I agree, you do have some work to be done. It really is a good start, but it's far too short and too simple. Go into detail! Why is ...

Hey! :D I liked it. It was very interesting, and had mature subject matter. The thing is, though, is that your poem consists of more telling then actually showing. I'd ...

Hey! Well, you didn't really give us much to work with, so I can't really tell where you're going with this. It was interesting, but a tad bit too short. ...

Hey Zaddie! Awesome poem. Really lovely. The rhyme flowed well and didn't seem forced, and we as readers could see the emotions going through your head. Great job! Every time ...

Hey Lifeblood. Your poem was very interesting. I loved the imagery, and the idea was original and fun to read. However, as Kamas said, the rhyme is a bit immature. ...

Hey Mo! Blu here, as promised! Your poem was really good! It created a great imagery that I could see inside my mind as I read, like a movie in ...