Love

Wow, after all these reviews you've still yet to edit it =/

Hey, Bailey! Long time, no see.

This is cute; I like the description of love, but why make it so outward? If you had used first person and said "I", I would appreciate this a lot more than I am. "You" is an outward gesture, and you're not making it clear if you're directly speaking to someone, so I'm taking it as a general addressing of the audience.

You shouldn't, dearie. Make them personal to you or something because, here you're telling us what to feel, and seldom can this be done excellently. If you want your audience to feel for you, let them imagine thier own feelings.

Juneth

I think this piece needs a bit of work, but I like it. You have made love confusing, bad and good. Although, if I hadn't read the title, I would have no idea what the poem would be about.

A little bit of fixing up could be good, but I liked it. Good job!

Keep Writing

~Mo.

Hello!

I like this but it is too short and sweet. Love is very complicated and one stanza just dosn't cover it. Also the word 'burry' should be 'bury' with one 'r'.

Just have a quick re-draft! You do need to tweak a few things but I think they have been mentioned above so I wont bother going into detail. This has the potential to be good, it just needs a few changes and some more added onto it.

Keep Writing,
~Lydia

Hi there, I'm Grin.

Right. Well, this was a little short, but it was sweet and with some work it will be rather nice. It could really be elongated, you've not put an awful lot of substance into it.

All the problems I can think of have been mentioned above. I think that you're using some very cliched phrasing, but that can be sorted out quickly.

The other thing is

messed up on the 4th line, the two points should be switched.

Hello there, Boo!

It's beautiful; it's ugly #BF0000 ">>Ah. Beautiful and ugly: common, garden variety words. So I see that you think love is two-faced, but using such weak, overused words like that makes it seem like love is just...there. Really it's an emotion that never fails to amaze; why do you think it's been immortalized by artists of all types since, well, forever ago? If you want to make something seem like it means something to you, you want to give it high praise. For instance, I would say that love is "resplendent" and "revolting." Hm...I kind of like the alliteration there, too! Go into your thesaurus and find synonyms that reverberates in your very atoms that describes how you feel about love.

You show it; you burry it inside you #BF0000 ">>"You show it" isn't enough. If it weren't too cliche, you could stand atop Everest and scream it down the mountaintops with one of those horns they have in the Ricola commercials so that it makes the foundations crumble. "Burry" should be "bury," but this is also overused. You could hide it like a five-year-old hides the last cookie from his sisters.

Feeling over joyed; crushing your heart
Burning in your soul; you're sitting on a cloud
It's lifting you up; it's holding you back #BF0000 ">>I'd have to say the same for these last lines, but I'm done being redundant in here.

Hi Bailey! I'm Kat, and I'll be reviewing.

So, first, this is really short so there's not much to review. But like they always say, better quality than quantity? Or whatever it was like that xD I'm sorry to say you lack both of them in here. Quantity, because this needs more development. You need to add something to this poem. Anything. I can't feel anything, and it doesn't even tell a story! It sort of describes the effects of love, but not in depth nor with much meaning. In quality, just because of that. Nothing a bit of a refresh and editing spree to the poem can't fix.

Give it a second thought, expand the ideas. Get more into it

Thanks for posting!
- Kat

Heyo!

I agree, you do have some work to be done. It really is a good start, but it's far too short and too simple. Go into detail! Why is love beautiful? Why is it ugly? Why can it crush your heart but let you float in the clouds?

You have some good ideas, but you need to work with it to make it your own. There are thousands of other writers out there who are writing about the same thing you are. Make it stand out from the rest.

Happy editing.

~blu

You have quite a bit of work to do on this piece... I really liked the last line, but the whole stanza was a mess... It was confusing, and too simple. I know love as an inspiration feels amazing, and it compells you to write, but perhaps going into more detail could really make this piece great. I look forward to seeing your revision

messed up on the 4th line, the two points should be switched.