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The forest is always a busy place. To the casual observer, (especially if they are human) It is almost always silent. But, to its inhabitants it is a teeming I'm ...

I’ve been sent on a mission. I am of no religion, of no cult, of no club, of no family, of no race, of no age. I’ve been sent on ...

This was more humorous than sad, which was odd seeing as to how the girl in the story broke up with Paul...but somehow instead of that being like not right ...

Very, very interesting for sure. I don't know anything about plays so I can't really give a good critique. Although some of the scenes did seem kind of unrealistic...but I ...

It’s the way songs just touch you in a way you thought was just out of reach. Mebbe you can do something about the repetition of "way" here. The words ...

There he stood, tall, slim, but in his own way, handsome. But in his own...that part kind of implies that you're saying other people might not think much of him ...

Mmkay, so it is way too rushed to really be able to enjoy anything. The characters and dialogue could definitely use some spicing up, and you definitely tell way too ...

Yeah, like Griffinkeeper said, uncapitalize the title... “No! She is my daughter and I am her mother! I have a right to be with her! Besides you are so wrapped ...

Separate the paragraphs, I thik it's a wee bit hard for people to read as it is like this, which might be why there isn't any comments on this. I ...

"Just Think you're missing something there. As far as the idea, it was nice, though I'm not much one for happy endings but ah well that's just me. Personally they ...

More detail would definitely spice this up a bit, and grab the reader and make them more interested and involved. As far as the idea, it's very typical and I've ...

I think you'll get more comments if you break this up into smaller sections...most of the people on here seem to suffer from a bad case of A.D.D...*ducks for cover* ...

A cigarette dangled from the corner of Claude's mouth, smoke curling into the air, coalescing with the stifling gasoline fumes oppressing the tent.He was hunched over a changing table, his ...

I think in the beginning maybe explain why Kipp isn't as nice as the adults think he is. Don't just tell us, maybe show us an incident that proves it? ...

Yeah, I think it's pretty narrow-minded of people to diss this just because it's rap. I mean, I'm not a big fan of rap, but that's mostly because there doesn't ...