beccalicious94

Quite the interesting haiku, not so many of them on YWS. What I took away from this piece was you telling your mum that you will make it through, plain ...

This is probably my favorite poem on YWS. I can relate to it so much. I usually dislike the nature motif, but I know personally I can never sleep at ...

Spelling/grammar: "rows" should read "row" in the third paragraph This was a really well done piece. I like your use of showing rather than telling, and use of vivid, descriptive ...

I really like this poem. It's succinct, but I understand exactly what you are trying to say. The only thing that was a weird read was "But constantly eludes my ...

Spelling: "cloths I had already picked" should read "clothes", "to boring to deal with" should be "too boring to deal with". When you describe the car as "old" it is ...

This is definitely dramatic! In terms of poetry, I have never really seen someone be as liberal with a rhyme scheme as you have (there really isn't one), but in ...

I really liked reading this piece, it made em feel warm and fuzzy inside. You have a great manipulation over language and beautiful imagery. I particularly liked the line "I ...

Spelling issues: The Zac in "Zac and Cody" is actually spelled Zack (don't ask why I know this). Chics is also spelled "chicks" since chic is usually a word to ...

I really enjoyed reading this poem. It has a very nice flow to it and rolls off the tongue. You use very nice sensory details and I can feel emotion ...

This is a very interesting poem. I had a few issues with line 5-- it just doesn't sound well to me. Is line 6 supposed to read "a heart in ...

I really liked the theme of the poem. The only thing that made me a little uneasy was the punctuation of the first stanza-- the colons and the ...s slightly ...

I really like this poem! I'm a little confused about the tenses though because you write "had exist" and then "had been broken", "tried", "break it" so I am not ...

This poem is so cute! Although you definitely know what is coming, I think it is one of those feel-good happy-ending poems the hopeless need to hear every once in ...

In my honest opinion, it sounds like an intelligent rambling three year old. While I understand the motivation for posting it, to illicit a response from YWSers about your prodigee-like ...

I really loved this piece. It was very informal, and that was comforting in a way. I could totally relate to having crushes on boys who didn't even have me ...