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Hey there. Overall this has the makings of a great story. I had a few questions about your world, but everyone of them was answered in a way that didn't ...

Oh man, that ending. Sigh. it's good, but I hate dark endings. But it's still good. As far as fixing the ending, I think you need to make Myra more ...

Hey there, since you're planning on turning this into a film, I'll just tell you what I personally liked. Your world- maybe the idea of people being assigned jobs is ...

I think this is my favorite chapter. And considering what's happening between her and Eugene, the stakes just got so much higher. Your pacing for this story, and this chapter, ...

Hey, so I'm super late but I'm here. First, I actually love the character list at the beginning. It was definitely something I loved bout warriors, and i think it ...

This is a really emotional poem. I loves the repetition that happened in the first two stanzas, it really connected them together. I'll admit I'm not a fan of the ...

I'm not really good at critiquing poetry, so I'm just going to say I really liked this, particularly the way every line connected together and the way the poem flowed ...

I loved the idea of this. And the words you used flowed together so beautifully. It didn't feel like you were using a bunch of words to make it sound ...

Hola, I'll try not to repeat what was already said too much. At first I thought your story sounded a lot like revolution, the TV show, but I think you've ...

Hey there. I used to watch pokemon when I was little, but it's been a while. That being said I was still able to picture this chapter clearly in my ...

Hey there. The other reviewers mentioned the characters Hannah and Janessa, particularly how Janessa doesn't seam to add to the story. I think she has the potential to add, she's ...

Hey there. I've read a chapter previous to this, the one where he first gets the dream actually. Nice foreshadowing, it definitely made this scene more interesting. In my past ...

Hey there, and happy review day. I really liked this. You prose flows beautifully and is wonderful to read. I only have little nitpicks for you. First, is that you ...

Hey there! I haven't read the previous chapters, but I wasn't lost, which means you're doing a great job creating distinct characters and a clear plot. I have one little ...

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