armisael

ive never seen poetry written in this format before and i love it! its a really unique way to make certain changes in the rhythm that really set the tone ...

this is wonderfully written! it feels so abstract at times, so unreal, as if the setting were a sort of fever dream, and yet the raw power in the language ...

This is really nice! Aside from the mythology/folklore references and the ocean aesthetic you present, I feel a sort of extended metaphor, like the speaker is distancing themself from whoever ...

I love this! The extended metaphor, the creative layout, everything about this poem is original and almost minimalistic but still layered. It's definitely relatable to so many people and can ...

I was so engrossed reading this, I almost instantly forgot the title and that you were writing about your pen instead of a lover. It goes without saying that the ...

Your imagery in this poem is very well done. Of course, in a descriptive poem like this, imagery is a key theme, but you pull it off fluidly and naturally. ...

Hello! This is very well written, and the feeling of loss present in this poem is strong and dramatic. One thing you could change involves the anaphora: for one, I ...

The ambiguity of this is truly astonishing. Anyone could find meaning in this, anyone who has ever lost someone dear to them. The raw emotion is simply wrought and expertly ...

This is exceptional!! The traditional rhyme scheme and positive attitude are simply fantastic. It's really quite nice to read something so innocently uplifiting like this. The pacing was a little ...

This is fantastic. We need more important social commentary like this in our everyday reading. Fantastic of you to put your voice out there; whatever anyone can do to help ...

I love the extended metaphor in this. Everything in this poem is solid and hard-hitting. The profanity sort of helps to drive the frustration home, and I love how the ...

The Road is such a good read! This is really accurate in presenting McCarthy's post-apocalyptic world and your imagery and wording work really well together. The repetition and anaphora help ...

Fun poem, very lighthearted and nice! The shifts in stanza length is a little disconcerting—try to vary your line length instead of the number of lines in the stanzas. There's ...

I like the shifts in pacing this has! It's well written. Try avoiding simple double-stating; "wraps around to surround you" can be condensed if you want to try playing with ...