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Thanks I will take another look at tht line. :)

I am a little confuesed by what you mean my point of view. I saw the earlier review and I thought I put it all into first person. Is there ...

This is less about your review more about how you are managing to bold your words an get those quote boxes. In the old YWS you could have the tools ...

Thank you for the review it really helped. I'll take another look and perhaps change a few things, but I will deffinatly keep all you said in consideration with the ...

Thank you. I fixed the uncapitalized I. Silly me, I know I read it over, but I don't have the best eyesight (tehee i sight, get it? cause like... oh ...

Ok so I took your advice and changed the point of view. Personally I think you were right and it clears up somethings that you said in your review. If ...

thank you for this imput. I know that dialogue is something I have been struggling with, and this is very helpful to see what other's think of it. Thanks again! ...

This was very funny i loved it!

Please let me know when you get the spacing fixed I really want to read it like you intended it, it looks really good!

thanks

thank you so much this definatly clears some things up! XD

Is there any way you could be more specific on where it doesn't flow? I don't usually write poetry so I would love to know how to improve

Thanks so much. your comment made me go all warm and fuzzy inside!

This is a strong piece. I can really connect with the points your trying to get across. I would have structured it more like a poem though. It would flow ...

thanks