aouther2b

So if there truely is beauty in the terribleness then how does one avoid it from being "emo" if that is what they want to write about?

thanks for getting back to me on what Xe means. :)

you are correct on the meaning of each stanza. Thank you for your review

Well thank you for educating me that espy is a word and not a typo and I'm glad you found a word that works well with this piece. I always ...

I was worried about putting in too much detail but if you think i should add more to explain things I definately will. Thank you for your imput.

Thanks. I have been playing with how to describe the age. I want it yo be times less so the whole date thing might change. Thank you for all the ...

Hey aouther2b here to review. What I liked: 1. "Over he who broke you" I love this line so much. It is perfec for this piece. The syntax yiu chose ...

Glad I could help!

Hey just wanted to see if I could clarify your comment on "age beyond her years". It was meant to say age beyond her years as in she acts older ...

I think Dreamwalker's choice on capitalization was really smart. You seem to have this potrayal of yourself as not this great powerful thing. By leaving the I uncapitalized I feel ...

If you look I actually have two more parts to this, Life's reply, and then Death's reply as well.

Just wanted to let you know that I too struggle with adding more description without compromising the flow so just keep working on it and it should become easier.

To answer your question, yes he is talking about suicide. I felt that it would be good for Death to remind Life that people can want death over life sometimes. ...

Thanks for you input. I will definately do what you suggested with both this and my other poems.