angelwing12

This is an interesting piece. The line "worse than that though was the fact that they were systematically detonating some sort of explosive devices that had been planted inside the ...

Let me just start off by saying that the title was amazing! It caught my attention right off the bat. First thing that I noticed was that you misspelled Certainly ...

I love this! I only have a few suggestions for you. instead of: "I walked up to the first person I see She whispered vague and quietly You're gonna want ...

This was a sweet piece! I like how it demonstrates her suspense and it also shows the love of the mother. However I do wish you would have used a ...

I enjoyed how deep this piece was. You gave enough to grab the readers attention and let them figure the rest out for themselves. This skill I feel is truly ...

I found this very enjoyable. I like how its in segments as though it is diary entries or sent in letters. The words flowed fairly well, however, I feel as ...

I LOVE THIS!!!! I was hooked from the "I hate her..." because it had caught my interest, had me asking myself why this character hated her? and who was the ...

I must say I was hooked from the first sentence! This is a truly amazing piece. The way you worded the first sentences: "The large trees that once towered over ...

I love how this flows! there are a few wording changes I would make just to help it flow even better. Maybe switch from past tense to present tense i ...

I found this very interesting and good. However, I feel as though it could use more detail. I found it was difficult to get into and a struggle to hold ...

Hey I thought that was reallly good and you should continue with it. You may not think it that great but that is the way it is with Kat Hope ...

That was so good For two intense, drawn out minutes, they followed the intricate twists and turns of the cavern, as its roof sloped gently but noticeably downwards. As a ...

He just raised his hand and pointed to Bill. Bill was not standing on the porch, he was handing from the roof with his throat slashed. you should fix handing ...

it was very good . but you might want to break it into parts some people might not read it for it is so long. But I believe that you ...

Hey it was great i loved it i started reading it and could not stop! I suggestion might be is to shorten it up some more but other than that ...