abelgaiya

This was quite dark and interesting. The emotions of the girl was described well, even though little is known of her. From her actions you have managed to tell us ...

This is way too infantile for me to have interest in. However, I'll just point out that there isn't enough detail given to draw in readers. Everything is merely shortly ...

Marvelous! This is the first piece I've read on YWS since I failed to come online for a few weeks. Your writing is so soothing. Describing such once magnificent creature ...

Well, I think this is a pretty good piece. It's interesting and somewhat mysterious. The title and description of the story led me to believe I would be reading a ...

Firstly, welcome to YWS. Hope you're here to stay. Okay, my problem with the first 3 paragraphs is that they need to have a relation to the story. Of course ...

Short story = plot + characterisation + description & grammar + flow & transition. The plot is commendable. Family and friendship accoutred with a crush is obviously what people never ...

Hello, Abel here to review. When one reads this, they think of Twilight, Underworld, Teenwolf, and other popular werewolf movies. This makes the originality of the story very meagre. There ...

Welcome to YWS. This is Abel here to review. Permit me to begin from the negatives of your work. The way this was written makes the environment of the narrator ...

Welcome to YWS. This is Abel here to review. First of all, this is an impressive piece. The conjugation of mystery and questionable rationality is absolutely amazing. Readers end up ...

Hello there, Abel here to review. I really liked this story because of the depth you reached. You infused more elements than a simple story would have. The leaky faucets, ...

Firstly, welcome to YWS. This is Abel here to review. Wow, this is a very touching piece. I wonder why you haven't had any reviews.. Your delivery was perfect, and ...

Welcome to YWS! Abel here to review. I can tell this would be an interesting story, but the format is so unattractive that one cannot read to the end. You ...

Welcome to YWS! This is Abel here to review. I liked the concept behing this story; BUT the delivery was a little rusty. First off, the first sentence was too ...

Hello, this is Abel with your review. I liked the plot of the story. A classic 'think it's supernatural but it turns out to be a human' mystery is always ...

This was pretty interesting and finely written. The part where she reveals her dead state was a shaker. I loved how you did it. The only perceivable downturn in the ...